Love is pain

Love is pain

A Poem by Tai-San
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One of my friends wrote it. Go Kayla! She's awsome.

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Love is pain,

When the person you thought loved you,

And yet doesn't.

Love is the direction you decide to take,

On your own withouit help.

Love is not a mistake,

Only an expirence that you take.

Love is guidence through the dark,

Into the light.

When you find someone with your time,

Love is worth anything in the world.

In the end,

Love is just what you make of it.

© 2009 Tai-San


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this poem is true. something we can all relate to. some constructive critisism though: When the person you thought loved you, And yet doesn't.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think this poem has a very innocent and true sentiment, however, it could be brought deeper. I'm not about giving cookie cutter responses to poems. I wanted to share this with your friend because any advise can make someone a better poet. Kayla, you have a wonderful talent, but you need to sit on each word and tell us more. The reader (me) wants to know more of your feelings, let us in. I can feel a hint of sorrow and mournfulness from this piece. Open your heart and this poem I'm sure would hit the floor. Nice write.

Posted 14 Years Ago


That's really well done, it's got so much truth behind it, and I can really feel the emotion with each word I read. Great job!!

- Kriss

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is no better way to put it. Love truly is what you make it..

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really good...i love it :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is awesome

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That's beautiful. Love is so expanding, I think, charly

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tell your friend that I think it's lovely. There's a talent there. :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this poem is true. something we can all relate to. some constructive critisism though: When the person you thought loved you, And yet doesn't.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 6, 2009

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Tai-San
Tai-San

New York



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I am single and an age. I hate people, but I love them. I get scared very easily and, well, i wont say why. I'm a poet, though i'm bad at it. My best friends are: Wa Ya As The Gothic Cowboy, ATG, .. more..

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