How Long?

This just goes into my whole 'dramatic life with charlott because shes ruining my life' catagory.

How long will you turn me away?

Why can't i ask you to stay?

You can be so mean,

Yet, for a reason, of what i've seen.

Can I tell you i did nothing?

Do you hear my heart thumping?

Usually I am shy,

And now, thanks to you,

I can, and probably will, die.

Reviews

[Evanesced]

Wow, I like this! I can really relate to it -- it's representative of my relationship with one of my friends. Good job! :D

[Kiara]

simple yet complex in its meaning, a moving piece that anybody can relate to : )

[Sandy sunday]

Oh-Mah-Lawd. AMAZING.

[Last Lying Look]

I like this.
I used to have alot days like this.
It's very relatable.
Excellent write!
-E.M.R

[Tari-kun]

Wow.
To tell you the truth, I really enjoyed this poem. It was short, and seemingly straight to the point.
Good job. :D

[Bella22]

This was both sad and beautiful! I know it doesn't seem like it now but, it will all work out for the best. I truly hope that things get better for you soon!

[Flame DM]

This poem is poetic and simple, my favorite kinds. Well done with this piece. I just hope this isn't a piece that you really want to fullfill. Life's harsh, and I can't deny that. Niether can I admit that I have ever been through exruciating, heart wrenching pain. But, I do have a sister who did. She wrote poems just like this, everywhere and at first I thought it was letting her genius out. Until I found it written on her clothes, on her shoes, on her skin, on the bus. She was hurting immensly and was trying to get us to see. I can't go through everything here because I myself don't want to go back down those memories. She went through so much hurt because of some stupid boy (Who I have yet to strangle to this day) and my family almost lost her. If your really thinking about this last line, please please dont. Life is worth it. Dont throw it away because of some pathetic kid because one life can affect so many. I dont know what I would have done if my sister did give in and never came back....many people love and care about you. A friend sent me here and i dont know if this helps. I'm not good at these things...actually i'm quite horrible at these things. Life's too short, you only get to live once. It flies by and its gone for good, dont make it any shorter than you have to.

Flame

[Rebecca Rogers]

A couple of the "i's" need to be capitalized, but other than that nothing was majorly wrong as far as punctuation/grammar go.

Good job giving the reader a feeling of pain and hurt. I think we all feel this deep depression at some point in our lives. But whether we want to believe it or not, life gets better.

Nice work! :)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Your longing for such a thing is a place we have all been but your conclusion really is not the answer. There is much love and light on this site and in the world although there are times when we can not see through the fog of our troubles. Believe me I know this very well as I have been in many dark places - years of turmoil but the fog is finally lifting and I have found a very great sanctuary here to express my feelings and share a great deal with many new friends who truly care. Please rethink these thoughts. A friend asked me to contact you and I hope that you will realize you are truly an amazing individual and your words and thoughts, heart, soul and mind are special and should be expressed to the fullest of their potential. I can empathize with your feelings, truly I can yet there is much to live for and we care immensely about you and your feelings. Blessings.
Love and Light,
Siddartha

[.:Naiira Harlow:.]

So sad. Please don't hurt yourself for the sake of another hurting you. I have felt your pain and hurting yourself isn't the answer. Very nice poem. If you ever want to talk I'll be here.
-Twilight