Please

Please be safe,
Please be secure,
Pleaes take care,
Please stay pure.
I have to go,
I have to leave,
Let it snow,
Then believe.
Take this as a token,
The very last words I've spoken.
I'll miss thee terribly,
Terribly shall need,
For thou shalt know,
Thou shall exceed.
To great hights,
With many great lows.
From the garden of Eden,
To my garden that i sow.
I miss you terribly,
I miss you now.
And still today,
I wonder how.

Reviews

[Through the Gateway]

This is a nice, sad piece. More moving with the understated "leaving", which sounds to me as if it's under your own power. You feel as though you cannot leave without being assured that the one you're speaking to is going to be safe and taken care of.

Beautiful.

[thefallenone]

I loved reading this.....know......it made me cry.

[Sandy sunday]

WOWEEEEE PROFFECIALLANLNDFA Proff.

[anthony lopez]

OMG! this is great!

[MakinItRainRed]

Wow. Very nice. Very well thought out. I love this poem.

[Chaos]

I like the idea of this poem, however, I feel if you took each line and expanded it a bit, it would flow so much nicer and with just as much power as you have intended this piece to be. Over all I liked the piece. Well done!

[Léo Duval]

I like the rhyming scheme - very powerful

[melancholia skies]

Wow! I love you expressionate old english! It's really good! I mean excellent! I really loved this piece! It was so emotional! Bravo!

[PhoeniX]

good work. easy flow with easy words.

[Des]

Very good. Flows rather well. I liked it alot.