On The Cusp

The way I feel about my boys as we come to a turning point in their lives. My job is comming to an end, well the hard bit, now it is up to them to fly higher than their parents....I know for sure they will try and try again to succeed, all I could wish f

 

 

 

Of great things!

She sees it in them.

Her children’s

Fully expanding wings,

Now! More than ready to fly.

 

Her teachings to guide them.

Hold them.   Take them high.

Keeping their balance, afloat, flying and dry.

The ball firmly fixed

With eagle, insightful inner eyes.

 

They will succeed.

They will proceed

Their will in her name be done

Their search for peace in justice and truth.

Protesting and protecting their world from vice and greed.

 

Fighting for their rights to innocence of youth

Like father, like mother, son’s like no other.

Author's Note

Any tips gratefully received....

Reviews

[J]

Oh! One of the MOST rewarding moments of parenting . . . when you have done your best, your efforts stand before you shiny and eager to take on the world. Your pride in your sons is a testament to your love and dedication, Tai. I'm proud of YOU!

"Fighting for their rights to innocence of youth
Like father, like mother, son's like no other"

Beautiful. Truly a gift you have given them. Well done, mama. ;-)

j

[Partha]

Blended with the motherly grace, love, bless and hope for her children. Effectively brings out the everlasting and pure relationship between them. Heart warming.

[Amy..... "sing To ..]

Tai,

Wonderful. I love the arrangement of this poem.

I really think the "power punch" line would be.... "They will suceed"

amy

[wizthom]

love the way you wrote of, spoke of, took hold of ,
the one gift God gave the world ,
parents,, the same love he has for us,the same faith he has in us..
i see u are well versed in truths of the soul..peace wizthom

the only tip i can offer is not to be swayed from ur style of writing,,it is fresh new and ur own..peace wizthom

[kurrupted]

wow! lovely and deep,
the lines alive they speak,
thought provoking as it seeps,
down to the reader's innermost recess,
parenthood
parenthood
lovely personification too, and the stanza's link really good.