Pleasing Poison

Furling a piece of foil

into a hollow little roll

he puffs pleasing poison;

sleeps isolated from realism

There are pipe dreams in his eyes,

brightens when twilight disappears

His comatose brain films radiant reveries

at night, within his mind’s stilled senses

Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut

the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart

Switched it to exhibition of aggressive notions;

inaugurated bad blood between him and life

When he finds no pleasing poison,

lacerating arms calms him down

Thirst and hunger abandoned

He’s a spectacular skeleton

in loneliness’s grave

  sans elation

Reviews

[pinhead07]

I really enjoyed reading this, I was a heroin addict, started with smoking it in cigarettes, then chasing the dragon and then injecting it, fortunately listened to the voice of reason and quit a couple of years ago, this poem really captures all that really well, pleasing poison indeed, you really start losing it in quite a short amount of time, try to quit but it's just too difficult to quit and stay off it for good, lacerating arms and all, I've been there, haha, withdrawal is the worst, nothing calms you down, too tired to walk, painful to sit, can't sleep, eat nothing, until the next fix, glad I got off it, anyway, I'm rambling, this is well written.

[¿]

These scenes are so familiar to me and all that you said are totally understood. I find a little baby-like soul trapped in an addicted persons body fluttering to be free, getting angry without any reason and sleeping most of the time, laughing anyway! Your victory over this poison is tremendously appreciated, Am so happy for each person who does so. Thank you for sharing your ramblings, it was a pleasure to hear, Be blessed and smile =)

[richieb]

Your words evoke strong images of the pain and turmoil of drug addiction. You also captured the sad surrender of emotions and reality. The dreams of peace and tranquility quickly turn to nightmares. Strong writing, well done.
Peace,
Richie b.

[¿]

I found that your words have made me elated....Thanks very much dear friend....Be blessed :)

[Chris Shaw]

Drug addiction, such a curse. People experiment thinking that they won't be lured into its relentless grip. Before they know it, they are sucked in to the vortex. Your lines dear Tahsin remind me of those I have known who took that pathway and paid for it with their lives. Powerful reminder.

Chris

[¿]

Even I'm known to some people who've been through such devastation....Had to scribble something upon this matter.....
Many thanks for reading this dear Chris! Prayers and love on your way....Stay happy and safe this holiday🎅

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear one, and I wish all the best for you too.

Chris

[Norman 223]

This is the frightening truth about addiction.. It starts as a "curiosity", experiment that appears to be pleasurable, then it's insidious grip becomes a fear of living in a real world. By then the destruction begins.
The physical "shape" of your poem also illustrates visually the rise and decline of the perceived elation of the "high" to the final mental destruction.
A perceptive and visually graphic pen picture of this scourge, Tahsin.
I agree with Dr YumnaKay. that full stops will emphasise and heighten the impact of these changing images. But otherwise, an excellent piece of writing .
Norman

[¿]

It's an honour for me to hear your encouraging words on my writing....am so elated that you liked it!😇
I'd surely try punctuating this one.
Many thanks again for bestowing your blessings on me....Almighty’s grace be upon you, ameen :)

[john l smith]

This is all the more relevant as OD's pile up to the sound of eulogies.
Some start as innocent painkillers, wrongfully prescribed but however, the statistics are alarming and steadily climbing
You have done an effective portrayal
Dave

[¿]

Many thanks dear Dave for reading this....you said the bitter truth which i can never deny...Be blessed :)

[Deep]

The way you draw this poem, it tells your creativity. "Artists sometimes seem so everyday in their talk and demeanor that we understood them like all others. Only when we are left to witness their creativity then we know their fortitude and pedestal they live in." The structure of the poem is an example of Altar poems, it feels so good witnessing your creativity and hard work.
Coming to the poem, you have supplied it with tiny details with images, and your own style. It feels like you have a close encounter with this situation:) nicely done.
keep shining!

[¿]

Well that's the main advantage in being closer to a situation which we can paint with the tiniest and the unseen details it can ever have...
Thanks so much again for reading this Deep...am honoured by you!
Almighty's grace be upon you, ameen :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like the subject matter and your structure as well, was it intentional or a spur in the moment thingy? Just curious ;)
I love your last lines; that ending nicely captures the struggles of an alcoholic.
The small, itchy (bitchy:P) part in me would have loved this write more if you'd added punctuations but oh, I did enjoy reading it very much. :)

[¿]

The second one😀
I'll try punctuating this....thanks so much Yumna for your visit here and for the lovely words...Be blessed! :)

[Christy the Poetic Hear..]

Not only the theme is well-chosen and the words are well-balanced but the structure is also creative. Thanks for sharing!!!!!!

[¿]

Thanks Lovely!!😀

[wordman]

never could understand why any body does this crap

[¿]

Nor could I😕

[wordman]

who knows ,it might be great,but i doub`t it bourbon and coke and mayme some smoke,i know angel has some

[Zayir]

Wonderful explanation on a drug addict. Any addiction sucks and people tend to forget that people start doing drugs to get away from reality. Withdrawal, by chance or on purpose, can literally kill you. You feel like your dying, you look like a skeleton. The shivers, the stiffness, you can't pay attention to anything or think clearly. The pleasing poison is pleasing for the mind, but only for a short time. The poison devours you, and those around you. Very elegant, but I expect nothing less when it comes from you ;)

Much Love

[¿]

Am on the seventh sky of joy today!!...many thanks for the greatly encouraging review my friend...am indeed grateful to you....Almighty's grace be upon you, ameen :)

[lightsong]

amazing one dear Candy, and I believe one of Your bests, strong images written very well, flowing with strong feelings, I love it when young writers write about different things around them, it means they are aware and care about making the world better, the hope of future they are.

[¿]

Ahan! You appreciated me so sweet😇....Thanks really very much my dear Light angel for the encouragement on my journey of learning....be blessed!!💝