Pleasing Poison

Furling a piece of foil

into a hollow little roll

he puffs pleasing poison;

sleeps isolated from realism

There are pipe dreams in his eyes,

brightens when twilight disappears

His comatose brain films radiant reveries

at night, within his mind’s stilled senses

Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut

the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart

Switched it to exhibition of aggressive notions;

inaugurated bad blood between him and life

When he finds no pleasing poison,

lacerating arms calms him down

Thirst and hunger abandoned

He’s a spectacular skeleton

in loneliness’s grave

  sans elation

Reviews

[pinhead07]

I really enjoyed reading this, I was a heroin addict, started with smoking it in cigarettes, then chasing the dragon and then injecting it, fortunately listened to the voice of reason and quit a couple of years ago, this poem really captures all that really well, pleasing poison indeed, you really start losing it in quite a short amount of time, try to quit but it's just too difficult to quit and stay off it for good, lacerating arms and all, I've been there, haha, withdrawal is the worst, nothing calms you down, too tired to walk, painful to sit, can't sleep, eat nothing, until the next fix, glad I got off it, anyway, I'm rambling, this is well written.

[¿]

These scenes are so familiar to me and all that you said are totally understood. I find a little baby-like soul trapped in an addicted persons body fluttering to be free, getting angry without any reason and sleeping most of the time, laughing anyway! Your victory over this poison is tremendously appreciated, Am so happy for each person who does so. Thank you for sharing your ramblings, it was a pleasure to hear, Be blessed and smile =)

[NonsenseTyper]

Visually these lines make the shape of an Iron bomb, such as those which descend from Jets onto cities. literally addiction destroys but metaphorically it is exactly like having a huge chunk of steel weighing on your shoulders and mind every second! So whatever poison that can lift this unbearable weight is definitely a pleasing poison. Imagine not being addicted and consuming some poison of choice! emit the chains, overcome the compulsions of the ego, seek independency of spirit rather than dependency of body, then it is purely inspiring to subject your mind to any poison for a change :) I loved this poem! thank you for sharing...

[¿]

Addiction to me is a mirror that shows multiple views if kept in different thoughts, there are demerits mostly but few merits keep peeking up, just like you said it helps to become independent from the shackles of what one's body has made. The shape took place unknowingly while I'd finished writing it halfway then decided to make it how it is now. Thanks so much for your generous words, each inspires me!🍀🌸

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

I noticed two double meanings in this poem, whether or not intentional.

You meantion "pipe dreams" this could be considered something wanted yet unattainable, or, dreaming of smoking a pipe. It goes well with the theme of addiction.

Then there is "bad blood" which could mean a bad relationship, or, injected drugs in the bloodstream. These two double meanings in your poem take what I'd say is a great poem, and improve on it even more. Thank you for sharing.

[¿]

Of course you're both way right RJ.
Bad blood is created by addiction between a life and it's consumer. Many thanks for understanding, be blessed :)

[Lorry]

Whether it be crack, smack or meth, it is kinda hard to understand why so many people don't know it can be quite moreish and should be left well alone.... Says the guy who smokes weed... Just for medicinal reasons of course 😀

[zainul]

Missed the beauty of the shape for one year.Created a perfect spectacular design without compromising the message on addiction.I am really fond of playing with shapes.Also enjoyed similar shapes with mathematical problems in early books.Finally can't resist the temptation of sharing the famous song of Tagore on the confession about taking poison.It is here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B3O8rlXVpJU


আমি, জেনে শুনে বিষ করেছি পান।
কবিগুরু রবীন্দ্রনাথ ঠাকুর

আমি, জেনে শুনে বিষ করেছি পান।
প্রাণের আশা ছেড়ে সঁপেছি প্রাণ।

যতই দেখি তারে ততই দহি,

আপন মনোজ্বা�™া নীরবে সহি,

তবু পারি নে দূরে যেতে, মরিতে আসি,

�™ই গো বুক পেতে অন�™-বাণ।

যতই হাসি দিয়ে দহন করে,

ততই বাড়ে তৃষা প্রেমের তরে,

প্রেম-অমৃত-ধারা ততই যাচি,

যতই করে প্রাণে অশনি দান।

[¿]

I can't express in words how happy I am to have Tagore's poem as a review on my poem! How could one flourish so much intelligence in oneself. His poem সোনার তরী is my favourite for I can take as many meanings from it as I can, it inspired me a lot in hard times to restart again. Thank you for your generous appreciation, Sir. Hope you're well and safe, Ramadan Mubarak =)

[zainul]

ঘুমাতে যাবার জন্য কম্পিউটার বন্ধ করার পূর্ব মুহূর্তে তোমার সুন্দর লেকটি চোখে পড়লো। অনেক খুশি হয়েছি। ভালো থেকো ।মাহে রমজান আমাদের জন্য রাহমাত নিয়ে আসবে এই কামনা করি।
আল্লাহ হাফেজ।

[¿]

আমীন.......

[zainul]

আমীন.......

[Dave Brown]

There is a fellow that we pass most everyday
for years his brain was laid away
miserable and unfriendly
a real dud
then he started smoking it in a pipe
and it made his attitude very bright
now he's a fairly pleasant sight
that drugs seem to have made alright

you form/layout is impressive (including poem)
that must have taken some brain squeezing to create
great write

[¿]

Yes Dave! The pleasure he searched, we failed to provide him and he found that in drugs. Squeezed a bit of my brain but am so glad that you as a reader see this worthy of reading. Grateful I am, thanks a ton and be blessed😇

[AJNJ]

Hey hey hey....Now wait a minute! I swear you didn't know me in 2018 when you wrote this!! Now how did you write this poem so beautifully on me! You hit the bulls eye Tahsin! Hhaha!

On a more serious note, great, impressive vocab once again!

Ordeals of failure constrained him to shut
the shop of sterling virtues residing in his heart

Tis just fantastic, my friend. You seem like a diamond that with a bit of cutting here and there could just dazzle the world. Write on! We need more such poetry!

[¿]

Believe me I did wrote this on a person I know, he finds these pleasing poisons keeping him alive, also he is a successful person which is strange! I shouldn't say this but I found drugs managing some cruel minds very well and for that am thankful to it sometimes. So many thanks to you for your kind words, am blessed! =D

[¿]

Write** 😆geezzz

[AJNJ]

I always enjoy your poetry :)

[John]

Drugs are inimical to life and unfortunately younger ones don't get it. Great write.

[¿]

Undeniable true said, John. Thanks so much for your visit :)

[Thepensiveplayer]

Very thought-provoking! Sometimes in our darkest moments in life we reflect on what brought us there and what we had planned. At the same time, we also look for any way to escape our pain with a facade of pleasure to relax our minds. Then the pain continues to rear its ugly head until we decide to face it. Yet, sometimes we never do.

[¿]

Very few get to overcome, and the rest are left to be in addiction as long as they don't harm us. I'm really happy on your thoughts, be blessed :)

[likhon]

Some genius writer you are. Best of luck for your future creative endeavors

[¿]

Bunch of thanks for reading and your time =)