Been a while eh?

Alright so I wrote part of this in 8th grade(the bold part), and I reconnected with a old friend. So I "rewrote" it (unbold) and entwined them together!

For so long I have wished for someone…

To make me feel more than none

Someone that can take my breath away…

To hold me up and make me feel okay

Then you came and swept me into heaven…

A lucky find, more lucky then seven

I sit on the clouds…

Hoping that this will make you proud

Not anything anyone says about us matters to me…

Because you hold This key

You are the one…

There is no other one

My only one…

Please don’t shun

I no longer have to keep searching…

Or do any more researching

You hold the key to my heart…

Let’s begin with a brand new start

I don't need anyone else…

When you’re here

I don't want anyone else…

When your near

The only person I want and love is you…

And god it is still ever so true

Just you.......

No fluke….

Reviews

[Tiny Moments]

O haha, well... Actually this poem was for my First girlfriend (the bolded part) and we broke up and didnt talk to eachother for 5 years, then we started talking again and well I developped the unbolded part for her. Honestly I don't LOVE her I was being Cliche and cheesy for her. I do really like her though haha.

anyways we stopped talking once again... which is a drag. but when we start talking again, I will make sure to Put a 3 line and put MORE visuals.

P.s. sorry about you're breakup, I actually had a ROUGh breakup too last july. YOu'll heal and just go out and look for the right one!

[Angelheaded Hipster]

Hi Nate.

Funny....I stumbled here cause well...the booze is funny. I like the honesty of the piece, but from someone whos just been through a very rough break up...I dont know if the words would ring true enough. I would like to see more than pretty words on the page...I would like to see more visuals...nothing cliche mind you...but a lot more visuals, painting of just how much you love "the one".