Monsters

The Monsters we become when we give into temptation.

I'm the Monster
under your bed.
Don't you fear me,
now that I'm in your head?
And in your closet,
Oh be afraid,
I know exactly what you'll say.

Something inside me tells me to run.
From the depths of my heart, the devil says
"Stay a while, Stay a while".
When everyone else is searching for blood,
the evil inside me just won't reconcile, force a smile.

I know that you're still with me.

I see you standing there
empty heart eyes full of tears,
I think I know just what you're feeling.
Crooked smile and a hole in my heart,
Stop right there honey, don't even start.
I want to know just what you're thinking.

My mother told me "Listen Son.
Fear is the start of pain,
but don't be afraid to Love."
If you can hear me
all broken-hearted souls,
raise your voice up,
'Cause you're not the only ones.

I see you standing there
empty heart eyes full of tears,
I think I know just what you're feeling.
Crooked smile and a hole in my heart,
Stop right there honey, don't even start.
I want to know just what you're thinking.

Where were you?
Where were you when
Where were you when I needed you the most my friend?
Where were you?
Where were you when
Where were you when I caught myself falling again?
Where were you
Where were you then?

I see you standing there
empty heart eyes full of tears,
I think I know just what you're feeling.
Crooked smile and a hole in my heart,
Stop right there honey, don't even start.
I want to know just what you're thinking.

Author's Note

Probably not your favorite, and again, wordier than usual. The repetition with the "where were you"'s is awful on paper, but perfect for the song. One of our best songs live.

Reviews

[Harley Ann]

This is deep...almost reminiscent of My Chemical Romance's "Welcome to the Black Parade" :3

[Debbie]

where can I hear it? you tube?

[Dove]

The repitition gets me everytime. This is a great poem. Very beautiful.

[Priscilla Sayers]

I like this. It could actually be a song really:)
Nice flow. you grab attention and hold it through out. Nice job.

[topsyturvy]

Wow this was such a beautiful write. I loved the repetition of the where were you's, and also i loved the flow of this.

[NovaeSpes]

Amasing, true talent and thus showing you are very good and should just keep going I loved it.

[Salem Fitzgerald]

"Where were you when I needed you the most my friend?" I love that line. Great work

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Your authors note... understandable about the repetition, I could picture it being sung as I read it all. I disagree though, because I like the a lot. It's that childhood time coming back into the readers mind; or at least mine. Really nice display of the dark.
I love this part here:
"My mother told me "Listen Son.
Fear is the start of pain,
but don't be afraid to Love." "

[Boldpen]

Very heart grasping!!!!!!!
It was beautiful, inspiring and totally catching.
I believe the when this one will be sung... it's beauty must be tenfolds.
The words were brilliantly chosen and greatly justified.
Wonderful .

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

this is awesome! i love how theres a beat to it and i like the imagery :) x