Grey-Sky Lullaby

I was asked to write a song for a wedding. Here the resulting lyrics.

 

I'll try this on with you

I'll write a song for you

Lay out this quilt on a hill

Listen for the birds as they

Sing that pretty story of

A girl who found a love that was real

It's ok, It's ok.

 

You'll put on that pretty dress

The one the crowd will like the best

White dress you'll only wear for a day

Then we'll see our families

You're smiling as you walk with me

The sky will watch the doves fly away

It's our day, It's our day

 

Oh, oh falling in love from the start

Oh, but now that I know who you are

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for a star,

I love you so

 

Oh, oh, falling in love from the start,

Oh, but now that I know your whole heart

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for the stars,

I need you so...

Author's Note

I know the last two stanzas are almost identical, i just included both because one is sung softley, and one is belted at full volume. I didn't want to include only one because I didn't want the song to be too short.

Reviews

[SamBug]

Oh, oh, falling in love from the start,

Oh, but now that I know your whole heart

I love you more

Breathe slow, honey oh darling we both know

I wouldn't trade you for the stars,

I need you so...

This is the sweetest lines I have ever heard. It was the best part of this whole poem. You're an amazing writer. please don't ever stop!!!!

[Aleah]

This is so beautiful. I am sure every girl will love it also because i am sure they want the one they are marrying to feel the same way. Its how a guys SHOULD feel when he's getting married. I love it. :3

[Adelia Alighieri]

I wonder why I can't help 'awwing' at your songs - this one's sooo sweet! :) Great job done, they must have loved it.

[Dinesh Sairam]

Tender and naive, I love this piece a lot! Kinda has the 'Johny Mayer' feel to it (I was reminded of 'Your body is a wonderland' and 'When you say nothing at all', quite strange). The marriage crowd would have passed on to you a million blessings to you. A job well done, Tad. :)

Keep writing.

[Elwina]

I like it Tad, very nice, soft and tender.

[Tali Katzman]

I love it!

it really is tender and touching,I would really like to know how it sounds when you sing it ^^

[♍ Kirstin ♎]

Dude this is amasing. The title's a bit misleading for me though. But, I'm curious to hear how you'd sing it but I think it was done kinda high (not extremly kinda a nice midway point between high and middle grounds), and something's telling me you done it on piano, even although it'd sound amasing on an acoustic guitar with arpegiation..... Anyway before I keep rambelling on it's a really good write. =D

P.S. this is going into ma favourates =)

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

awww TK!!! This is so soft and tender. really sweet... i'm sure they loved it! you really have skills as a lyricist ^-^ ii flows together so well, and with very intelligent phrasing..