So Help Me God

Pledge. Lyrics.

 

One, long breath

Cause we both know

That you need it

Silence, again

Cause we both know

That I did it

 

Give  me comfort I don't deserve.

Feed me words, but try not to hurt.

If you stay with the same love

you walked in with,

There's no doubt I'll walk out 

A better man

 

'Cause this time,well I'm not

Crossing this line,

So help me God.

 

Wrap me in blankets I'll never need.

I've got all this warmth when you're here with me.

If you stay with the same love

you walked in with,

There's no doubt I'll walk out

a better man

 

Oh, this time, girl I'm not

crossing this line

So help me God.

'Cause won't I watch you cry

For the hunredth time?

Oh, please not that again, Oh God...

 

I need you to know that I'm still real.

I need you to say what you still feel.

 

This time, well I'm not

Crossing this line

So help me, God.

Reviews

[Stammers]

Argh how do you do that??? Maybe it's because I'm musically retarded, but it amazes me how you can write lyrics, and the music, and still do it so that when read without instruments and without singing it, it's still gorgeous.
I don't know whether the melody is first for you, and this is there to decorate your music, or you begin with the words as a foundation and go from there, but either way this is solid, I'd love to hear the song, I really would, I'm stunned by people who can put feelings into music sheets, it's an art I'll never be able to master.

My admiration, totally. You said so much simply, and perfectly, and honestly without the false fluffy imagery you find in poetry that has no bearing anymore in a modern world, gorgeous.

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful flow of words. The story was strong in your words. We need to be humble sometime to seek a opening back into someone life. I like this poem. Outstanding words.
Coyote

[Abdul Aziz]

"Give me comfort I don't deserve.
Feed me words, but try not to hurt."

"Wrap me in blankets I'll never need.
I've got all this warmth when you're here with me."

I think those lines prove what an awesome writer you are! Superb poem. I don't think I can add much to what the others have said here, except to say that they are absolutely right in heaping all the praise they can on this!

"Lyrics".. I'd like to hear the song please!

[Pirateking37]

Well I don't need to tell you this is good, you know it. So keep up the good work ^^.

[Alice Luanne Sutcliffe]

I really felt the emotion in this, especially the lines, "I need you to know that I'm still real. I need you to say what you still feel."

Love the repetition, it works very well in this.

[Radha Jaisingh]

love the way uve put ur words across.....very very touching

[Poeticpiers]

A heart felt plea and a promise beautifully expressed. I hope she forgives you

[Miss Coral]

Great piece... smooth rhythm and excellent use of repetition. Powerful and fragile at the same time. Wonderful. c:

Coral

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

Excellent.....

[Jason Ellis]

"Wrap me in blankets I'll never need.
I've got all this warmth when you're here with me"
Those are my favorite two lines,
but I enjoyed the entire thing.

Overall, an excellent job. Keep it up(:

[REALIZE]

"Give me comfort I don't deserve.
Feed me words, but try not to hurt."

Nice, I like the play with words and it was nicely written which means it was a great read. The inspiration was there and its repetition was cool. "So help Me God"
Thats watsup