So Help Me God

Pledge. Lyrics.

 

One, long breath

Cause we both know

That you need it

Silence, again

Cause we both know

That I did it

 

Give  me comfort I don't deserve.

Feed me words, but try not to hurt.

If you stay with the same love

you walked in with,

There's no doubt I'll walk out 

A better man

 

'Cause this time,well I'm not

Crossing this line,

So help me God.

 

Wrap me in blankets I'll never need.

I've got all this warmth when you're here with me.

If you stay with the same love

you walked in with,

There's no doubt I'll walk out

a better man

 

Oh, this time, girl I'm not

crossing this line

So help me God.

'Cause won't I watch you cry

For the hunredth time?

Oh, please not that again, Oh God...

 

I need you to know that I'm still real.

I need you to say what you still feel.

 

This time, well I'm not

Crossing this line

So help me, God.

Reviews

[Stammers]

Argh how do you do that??? Maybe it's because I'm musically retarded, but it amazes me how you can write lyrics, and the music, and still do it so that when read without instruments and without singing it, it's still gorgeous.
I don't know whether the melody is first for you, and this is there to decorate your music, or you begin with the words as a foundation and go from there, but either way this is solid, I'd love to hear the song, I really would, I'm stunned by people who can put feelings into music sheets, it's an art I'll never be able to master.

My admiration, totally. You said so much simply, and perfectly, and honestly without the false fluffy imagery you find in poetry that has no bearing anymore in a modern world, gorgeous.

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really lovely writing. I like your whole wording. Keep it up!
Do you read mine to Anguish and She!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Nice write for lyrics. Emotional.
I love these lines here you wrote:
"Wrap me in blankets I'll never need.
I've got all this warmth when you're here with me."

If you would like to correct this part:
Hundredth instead of hunredth in this line here "For the hunredth time?"

[TheElfPrincess]

This sounds very good and almost song-like. The emotion was very fresh, I like that. The flow and structure were good. I like the repeating "So help me, God" It sets a certain mood and gives strength to the words. Well done.

[Poetic Beauty]

These lyric make you think of a man/ woman who has cheated and is asking for another chance.

[ajasminewallflower]

Great lyrics and such a great song. I love it. I want it on my iTunes :D Great job

[TadKent]

to hear this song, go to facebook.com/prettygoes postal , or here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cr2gBcVRU6M

[loowzerX]

I don't know how I missed this write, but it is such an amazing piece. well done, I'd like to her it as a song :D

[Ashli Nicole]

Wow... I absolutly positively one hundred percent love this poem. Ohh dear. :)

[Sarah J. Kelleher]

Oh my, just so darn good! :)

[Wake Up!]

i've never read a poem that gave me chills...until now. it was beautifully written and the emotion is very nearly tangible. I wish that i had this kind of talent(: