She's pleading for him to hear.

:] This is well about God really because I am in fact Christian. This is about a time I went through and am currently working through still from when I attempted suicide.

The blood shed,
The cries unheard,
Couldn't you hear her?
Maybe
But you never bothered.


Cold room,
Vacant stares,
Lost smiles,
no one really cares.

Please listen!
Have you forgotten?
She's screaming,
Pleading.

But he does hear,
He does care,
She's the one who has forgotten.

Author's Note

I do not know about that last line. It sounds weird to me. Am I crazy? :D

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

Interesting. This is a decent poem that maybe could use a little more work for it. Perhaps reviewing the poem, and reading it out loud to yourself will allow you to see where you could improve upon this poem. The last line is pretty good. That's my only suggestion I really can make.