Rewrite (Love poison.)

I decided the old Love Poison needed something more. So while I had free time during Spanish class I started working on this. No It is finished. :D

Love poison(Rewrite)
Turn away from your love
Long since faded
"I'm just not in love with you anymore."
Not much more you could do

Poisoned
a sick heart
Missing words
Missing time
I'll never get those back

I feel sick
Nurses could not fix it
Where's my potion?
You were always the poison
The addiction I crave
It kills me

You cheat
You lie
I stumble
I fall

Burnt out
That's all it is
We rushed we fell
We're just burned out.

Author's Note

:D Review please.

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

I can tell that this poem means a lot to you. It seem kind of erratic within the structure of the poem. It doesn't feel like it flows smoothly. I might suggest using commas within the poem. It's an emotional poem which I can tell is important to you. I might also suggest reviewing the poem once more to see if there was anyway that you could improve it further.