My Kind of Man

What my kind of man is.......

born of blood & bones, the 

air flows through his lungs.

He's for me. The man is plum

goodness. He's my fortress,

under eyes & key. The boy

belongs to me. He can be 

gentle, he can be sweet.

Oh, my man keeps doe, but

made of more. Something

strong of mind, yeah he's

mine.  My guy is fly.

The man is of worth. 

I value him totally.                                                                                                                                                                

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your message describes one's partner/friend as a unique & interesting person. I like the way you use language that is traditional, along with more modern expressions. Your poem is fine the way it is, but since you describe yourself as a new writer who's learning, I will offer an idea for future writings. When you feel like using words like "gentle" & "sweet" -- these kinds of words are used so often, they don't have as much meaning anymore. So it's good to try to find a more expressive way to show this. It may be finding another more interesting word, or it could be some example to SHOW how this person is gentle & sweet . . . a real-life example, like saying he helps me with (whatever) or he touches me like (some endearing thing). Specific, unique details will make your writing more original & memorable. But you are definitely on the right track & your writing can only get better & better! Fondly, Margie

[ROXANE DORSEY]

T ha nkkkk you barleygirl for the positive input. I'm going to put that teaching to my rules of writing. thanks for the kind review and read.

[lightsong]

Simply said, but true, when You know what You want there is no confusion! all the reality of Your words make Your dream comes true! I hope You've found him Your charming man dear friend.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks for the kind review

[Relic]

To have a relationship that is as strong as a fortress itself, is one of the greatest things in life. :)

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Yeah right, thanks for the kind review and read.

[Matthew Kult]

Possessively Loving

Great Read

Matthew

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Glad you enjoyed the poem and thanks for the kind review.

[Matthew Kult]

You are welcome

Matthew