Loving You More Than The Sea

Baby take me. Love me. Hold me near,

oh, my dear.

When we're behind closed doors, our

love expands to the highest degree.

How our love, spreads wide as the sea.

No ocean can maintain our motion.  

In the deepest waters, lies schools of 

fish, they know love and show no love.

Best to stay ashore when your love isn't

sure.

Love can drown in the shallowest of 

waters. Perhaps I'm going to take

deep water lessons if our love starts

to lessen. Take it from many fishes if 

you put them on your dishes, their

love is no maybe, look at the thousands

of babies swimming out to sea,  

returning back to you & me to eat.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I do like this poem. Wonderful use of words and thoughts. I liked the complete poem. Thank you Roxane for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Jackie]

Lovely metaphor. Quite interesting way of describing it

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Thanks very much Jackie for the kind review and read.

[Einstein Noodle]

ouch...that is brutal my dear ;) ...eyow! i like the title and your metaphor ...one could do a whole lot with it if wanted ... i agree with Gee ..it is raw and i stumble ...but love is so many times awkward eh!? and i agree with jacob about this line :
"best to stay ashore when your love isn't sure"
it tells a whole story all by itself ..its a lonely lonely place on the shore ..without love :(
eating the fishes just kills me ...can not help but wonder where that came from Roxane! :}
E.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

the free flow just comes. and fishes came. I keep mention fish. i thing I having a baby??? thanks for the kind review. if I'm pregnant, I really need to make some of my work pay the bill. Babies aren't cheap!!!!

[Einstein Noodle]

no they are not ;)))) i have four grown and on their own ... we do our best eh!? never went without good food, clothes nor a roof ... not what one would call "top of the heap" ...but fine enough .. we make it if we try ... i hope you are very happy about the possibility ... saying my little prayers for you :)

[Gee]

What is this life if lived without love...........lonely.
Enjoy reading your writing as it seems as though, like mine, it is pretty much written as thought and posted unedited.
Good morning Roxxxxxxxxxxxxxannne

[Gee]

That's not kisses by the way it's sting singing......again

[ROXANE DORSEY]

i know all about that Roxxxxxxxxanne, right and thanks for the kind review. G GGeeeeeeeeeeeee.

[Gee]

Went to watch them in early eighties ( I think) but got roaring drunk and fell asleep....m

[ROXANE DORSEY]

how bout the fixer upper, take another read plz GEE for mistakes made.

[Gee]

Let me tell ya I'm as thick as a brick. If anything it would be lay for lies.
What I meant by unedited is that your writing is raw, not clean cut and calculated, different ( good different ) from most on here.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

gotcha thanks very very kindly

[Gee]

Tis my pleasure Roxanne

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Oh did you check out My Dreams?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

some really interesting metaphor here..

i like this....yes, "best to stay ashore when your love isn't sure"---

[ROXANE DORSEY]

Thank you for the nice review and reading my poetry,