Bottle Minds

Living mentally in a bottle.

I must shatter the walls or

life will stall. In this glass

lies my past. Presently I'll

build up waste & gas to get

the needed blast. Screw the

cork loose with ease.  For I 

can take the easy way out, 

straight up no cuts or gusts

to waste.

Reviews

[Taylor]

This was good very good. I like how you described how you would escape and how you must break down the walls.

[Coyote Poetry]

No wasted words in the poetry. I liked the directness and the realistic thoughts in the poetry. Thank you Roxane for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Matthew Kult]

Gorgeously Stimulating

Great Read

Matthew

[apennylate]

I am loving your style, Roxane... I definitely am a fan of it in my own work... We are just great minds that think alike! Haha... No cuts or gusts to waste! Blastingly penned...

[ROXANE DORSEY]

I am glad to hear I have least one fan. thanks for the kind review.

[apennylate]

Def' more than one fan...! You are welcome

[Donicca Dona L]

very well pointed.
a lot of people are living mentally into a bottle.
the expectation of how who we are(in our mind and how we should be )and than there is also the real part of how we are.
prison of the past that can't be changed or the future that is always unknown.
freeing our self with the present.

I really liked this one, this is the way I felt while reading this.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

glad you can read in between the lines. thanks for the kind review.

[Mirror]

Very beautiful poem, clear, and factual.

"Living mentally in a bottle." is what happens to most people. sadly, even the young ones. Even going on diet is like bottled medication.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks very kindly for your review.

[Einstein Noodle]

reads a little ominous to me ..perhaps a contemplated suicide ... and a mind dependent on medication maybe .. i read it three times and get new ideas each time but each time this line
"build up waste & gas to get
the needed blast." has such a shock and real to the streets effect on me ... even just the title .. how many of us live in them ... closed off tight .. not trusting, uncompromising ... your poem has really got me thinking this morning ..
E.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks for the review. its great./ pressure(waste,gas)

[AYVID N]

Indeed, it can get claustrophobic in the bottle. Better a timely release than a blast!

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks for the review and kind words.

[duff]

The walls are closing fast and anxiety kicks in because the fear of the cycle continuing is awful. You want to live like others and be free but sometimes our mind finds a way to reel us back in. But then one day something happens. Something amazing and that tears down the wall. It'll happen. Thanks for sharing this. It got the juices going. Plenty for though. Nice work.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks for the kind review.

[duff]

You got it.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Wow so on-point Roxane! We live in glass bottles, such fragile yet strong prisons. Our past chains us. Love the form , imagery and great rhyme pattern of this deft poem. Only way out is “straight up “- yes! Brava!

[ROXANE DORSEY]

thanks for review my poetry.