I want you to Touch me

 

I want you to Touch me

 the way you touch your hair

I want you to Touch me

 

I want you to please me

 the way you please him there

I want you to please me

 

What does it take

 to have you beside me

What does it feel like

 to be inside

 

Mumble my name

 as you walk by me

Make me wanna grab it

 and run and hide

 

I want you to Touch Me

Damn I want you to Touch Me, there

 

I want you to Touch Me

 touch me, damn it, touch Me!

 

Can I be alone with you

 Can I be alone

I don't know anymore

 

You won't even talk to me

 You don't even see me

What am I doing all this for?

 

I want you to Touch Me

Man, I want you to Touch Me

 

I want you to Touch Me

 Oh, how I want you to...

Reviews

[Annette Jay Sweeney]

I really like how you work with repetition. I don't always like lines repeating, but this works well for you. I definitely think you should use this more often. Maybe try writing a villanelle? If you're interested, look in my contests, there is one for villanelle writing.