The peach

The peach

A Poem by T.S. Ulmus
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Okay, the metaphors kind of shallow

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I dove into the sweetest peach
Surprised that it was in my reach
The furry skin met my face
Soft flesh and smooth as lace
My fervor was religious
So juicy and Delicious
I slurped and I lapped
My endurance nearly sapped
I found the nub of a core
Through many moans I implored
To passionately rub
And suck that nub
While juice dripped down my chin
It felt like such a sin
I didn't want to finish
My passion wouldn't diminish
Just wish it could last forever
My peach eating endeavor
But I supped and I sucked
Til' it was kissed and it was plucked
When my sweet peach had nothing left
I fell down in a heft

© 2020 T.S. Ulmus


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master piece, T.S.! sincerely, Amber.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Good thing you reminded the reader that the poem was about innocent peach eating twice at the end - I'd almost forgotten what the stated topic was and instead was going down a gutter lane!

Amazing imagery and descriptions - the peach was firmly in my imagination ;-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Wow...I've never heard such a... sensual way of eating a peach, lmao. I've never really thought about eating a peach the way that you described it, living in the Peach State after all. I think I might take peaches for granted, lol. This was a really descriptive, amazing poem. No surprise there! 😁

100/100

Nix ❤️

Posted 3 Years Ago


Some peaches have all the luck! Much enjoyed this delectable piece.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Great fun TS. You just have to follow the juice with this. I wish I could lick my chin.
Well done for this juicy peach of a poem.
All the best.
Alan

Posted 3 Years Ago


well ... delicious pop into me nog right away .. peach seems the perfect analogy says i .. its very difficult to "dive" into one without all that juice, flavor and scent running down one's chin ... i don't know .. not so shallow says i .. such intimacy can be a very sacred thing .. which your poem does allude to .. but overall i think your poem is fun, light hearted and ....delicious ... i like the rhyme ...it works .. i think in the closing line .. "heft" is too much of a stretch .. unless it has some street meaning i am ignorant of ... ..how about bereft .. or cleft ..or deft?? just some thoughts .. fun .. exciting, sensuous without being rude and fun read for me ... eating peaches has just changed forever ;)
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


T.S. Ulmus

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the constructive criticism, I'm giving serious thought to changing the last two lines... read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Years Ago

well ...how about "I fell back all blind dumb and deaf" ;)
Beautiful poem. Interesting lines

Posted 3 Years Ago


WOW! I've never wanted to be a peach so much in my whole life *wink! wink!* Nicely succulent & I love the way you crank it into a subtly-building crescendo (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


T.S. Ulmus

3 Years Ago

You'll always be my peach Margie. They say the sweetest peaches come from the more seasoned trees. N.. read more
Tasty, tasty Very very tasty. You have just added peaches to my shopping list. Positively drooling now :) Peaches are a sensual metaphor.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


I'm going to have to get more seriously into peaches. It sounds like a really cheap date.

Posted 3 Years Ago



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