Lost and found

This one ended up a bit darker than I intended, another Halloween offering

I found this scrawled on the back of a receipt while out walking on a bleak plane, the sky was overcast and I was surrounded by snow covered prairie grasses that could not wish to live again. Nearby there was a single glove, the rest pulled away by scavenging beasts.

I forgot how long I've been lost
there is no one to miss me anyway
Even if someone found me
I would still be lost

The receipt was for a fifth of Jack and Skittles.

Author's Note

Collaboration credits to Chris, though I didn't go with jelly bellies. Thank you for the input.

Reviews

[Diana]

"I forgot how long I've been lost
there is no one to miss me anyway
Even if someone found me
I would still be lost"- This whole section really resonated with me. So, I guess, pretty much the entire poem. Hah hah. Forever lost over here...

[Coyote Poetry]

I have notes and paper everywhere. Last year, I put them into a book. I use them to write the new poetry. It is amazing my friend. A few words can steal us back to a sad day. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Chris]

Would it have been any lighter if it had been a receipt for a fifth of Jack and a bag of Jelly Bellys?

Chuckling here. Seriously though, the clarity of thought was there though the Prose part could have been a bit more descriptive for a Halloween Fest.

[T.S. Ulmus]

I am quite tempted to change it, that's a great idea. To throw something so light at the end of a dark piece would really give a WTF moment. Sleeping pills are probably a little too on the nose anyway. If I revisit I'll give you a credit.

[Chris]

laughing now... a collab - who'd a thunk?

[Just Kim]

I forgot how long I've been lost
there is no one to miss me anyway
Even if someone found me
I would still be lost

I can understand this part, this is an emotional read. nicely done

[Ankita Dwivedi]

This one is dark but intresting . My imagination tok me far , and so did the words . We don't really celebrate halloween in india but i was always fascinated by it , since childhood from movies and tv . Maybe i will get to be the ghost someday .lol(this one was bad , i'm guilty).. It's been a long time since i've had the pleasure of reading your work . tyfs.
love ,
Ankita :)

[T.S. Ulmus]

Thank you for reading my latest piece, always happy to have your words. I promise there's some lighter stuff coming up.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

Lol... Sure.. Looking forward to it.. The pleasure is all mine :)

[AJNJ]

So many go this way...undiscovered for ages. Not missed, not found... or found too late. A truly dark tale that leaves a lingering uneasiness in the reader.

[barleygirl]

This is a powerful & intriguing snippet, becuz almost everyone has found a note that wasn't intended for him/her & then tried to put the puzzle together. You give us the pieces & the puzzle is pretty straightforward & easy to put together. Here's the part that felt a little "blah" to me: "out walking on a bleak plane as I explored a wintery corner of land" -- this feels so vague compared to the sparkling specificity in the rest of your poem. I would love for you to make this line snap a little more by painting the gloomy scene in much more specific terms. SHOW me "suicide" in the setting, even before your message gets there -- setting as foreshadow (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[T.S. Ulmus]

Great feedback! I think you're right, this one might take a rewrite . Frankly, I got this far and it was so dark that I didn't want to keep writing on it. But on your advice I will revisit.

[Jess]

I find this piece incredibly intriguing. It feels as if we are at the tip of an iceberg but so much more is just beneath the surface. Very well done!