Tater tot

I wish the toads would sing on key
I wish I didn't have to eat
I wish my chosen would choose me
rather than some guy named Pete

I wish I had a rhino named tater tot
I wish I was a Ninja turtle
I wish the tightness in my chest would not
cause my blood to curdle

I wish I didn't have to work
I wish that things were as they seem
I wish I didn't have to lurk
the outside of my own dream

Reviews

[Pete]

your wish is my command. you're not really asking for too much - you didn't ask to win the lottery or a harem or other such things. very enjoyable read that also causes one to ponder what they really, truly want ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

That is quite some wish list. You really aren't being greedy. Your wishes seem so random and everyday. I really like the cuteness of this poem.

Chris

[barleygirl]

This is one of my favorites of yours that I've read so far. I love how you write with a flippant irreverence combined with a tragic seriousness. It's like being tweaked from start to finish, kinda resembling how live tweaks us on & on. Being a fan of rhyme & rhythm, I love how yours has a subtle appeal, not at all in competition with your hard-hitting message. Your ability to combine disparate ideas into a popping collage of bizarre life is so admirable, I'm keenly jealous (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[T.S. Ulmus]

The praise of someone with your wordliness adds paddles to my trireme of joy (which unfortunately traverses the river Styx).

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with Anais. I wanted more verses. I want everything and I want nothing. The confused state of my old mind. Thank you my friend for sharing the entertaining poetry.
Coyote

[anais.vionet]

Very nice - I wish there were more verses =]

[Just Kim]

this is so creative, i enjoyed this, i got a laugh out of part of it

[Dave Brown]

Don't mean to be an anti, but I enjoy the sound of toads
To me it, the Toad's song means a healthy garden/atmosphere so I am happy to put up with a bit off key.
And they are so ugly, they are cute!
So true about dreams, although, I'd like to know where more of them originate

[Chris]

Rhino at face value has to do with nose... Taters as I understand it has to do with ears... personally I can't remember ever naming money or cash after anything else... curious.

The last two lines were "Wicked-type" cool... "Wicked" in the Oz sense - not the green one.

I liked this one - just wanted to make sure you knew.

[T.S. Ulmus]

Your words and review are always welcome Chris. Though I would associate a potato with eyes rather than ears, perhaps a cultural difference. Either way, thank you for the read.

[Chris]

"Taters in the ears" - another time and place... chuckling here

[T.S. Ulmus]

The rhino named tater tot was actually the impetus for this poem, though I understand it's the most discordant line. The rest is entirely autobiographical.