Had to google "banshee" becuz I grew up thinking of this as "wild Indian" as in "running around the house like banshees". I was amazed at the definition, so different than how I've always thought of it. A goddess wailing some impending death reminds me of orgasm being compared to a mini-death. I love how your language is subtle, rich & appreciative of what's being described. Definitely a sensual poem that pops! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
This reminds me of the sirens who sought to lure Ulysses onto the rocks. Whether fable or fact, a woman's treasures can indeed entice us men with a special kind of magic. (I speak for myself) Now, about that hidden temple...
What's not to love about poetry so irresistibly, intensely compelling, to the spirit's, heart's, and mind's deeper senses, and the photo speaks perfectly to the theme and ambiance.
Doubtlessly, your style's unique and intense, with the full array of poetic ingredients that lure and hold even the most accomplished amongst us from opening to closing lines … so much, in fact, I could not help but toss my 2¢ in to sing just a bit sweeter … thank you for the honorable mention, My Friend; it was a distinct pleasure (add an "a" to the first and penultimate lines to bring it all into count and smoother diction) … LOL!
Nice use of elision here: "Ne’er more lustrous shrine I’ll see." You've told a tale we know all too well, of how an angel's irresistibly luring charm can quickly turn to wildly abhorrent lashings.
What an imagination for originality your ink has laid upon the page, TS … amazingly so! ⁓ Richard 🍃
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thank you for your amazing review, as usual you are right, and I would like to add the "a"'s to the .. read moreThank you for your amazing review, as usual you are right, and I would like to add the "a"'s to the 1st and penultimate lines to help in readability. I got caught up in syllable count; it's easy to forget that I'm trying to be an artist not a mathematician when math was one of my first loves. One can break the rules of math or poetry when done on purpose. You were an awesome resource on this piece though, and for that I thank you.
I try to swerve into a curve that's not rutted by the thoughts of others while clearing the obstacles of the mundane.
I like receiving read requests for poetry, but... ya know, good stuff. more..