The kiss

The Kiss...

  Warm Southern breezes

  bring distant thunders' chorus

  to red sunset lips...

  briefest, fleeting sun

  lets evening bear witness,

  as forms intertwine.

  Fireflies mock faint stars,

  while cloud castles edge near

  slowly writhing embraces.

  Gifts of water

  drop unnoticed

  upon warm skin...

  their kiss undisturbed.

  Darkest night turns day

  in lightnings' brilliant flashes,

  revealing lovers' still repose.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Wow, what a lovein that was. Divine kisses. Aided by mother nature to ensure that it was a magic moment never to be forgotten. Sent tingles up and down my spine thinking about it. Experiencing it, well that would be something else altogether. Lovely description here.

Chris

[SavannahKay]

I've experienced one kiss like this in my life, over a decade ago.. In the rain, with the last man I was fully head over heels with. The universe had other plans for us apparently.. what they are, I'm still at a loss.

Thank you for taking me back there, if only for a moment. You're very talented at writing!

[T.S. Ulmus]

Ladies and gentlemen of the WC I present to you the subject of this poem. Unfortunately, she was not the recipient but that exact kiss was the Genesis.

[barleygirl]

I got a kiss like this one time . . . I think it was in Kentucky about 3 decades ago in the pouring rain. I wish I had ever thought, in my life, to write about this kiss as artfully as you have. I love how you paint this moment in a tumble of observations about all the sensations being felt at the time (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[T.S. Ulmus]

I had very much hoped that you would read this one. As usual, your review has begun my day in a good way. Thank you.

[Samuel Dickens]

This is lovely and conjures within me some brilliant images. A combining of nature and romance that is keen and memorable. Very well done!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very romantic tableau set out in words filled with colour and the sensation of lovers so focussed upon that moment.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

This poem took my breath away. Especially the second verse. Dusk transitions beautifully to night and yet the lovers, oblivious of the beauty around them, stay so absorbed into their own world!

Your poetry is exquisite! Lucky girlfriend!
If words are the net, then the fish is caught and fried already!

[T.S. Ulmus]

You got it! Lovers so entwined that they were oblivious to the evening storm. That's where I was in my head, and you're the first to really encapsulate that. Thank you for the review, but she's far from caught, she is a wind I could never hold, I just hope she blows in my direction sometimes.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I love to live with challenges. The more elusive a love, the better I feel chasing it.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

such beautiful words . passion is like a beautiful flower with heavenly fragnance andyou potrayed a garden over here.i absolutely loved it .

[T.S. Ulmus]

Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad you liked it and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

Needles, friend:)
Yeah I have posted one more, you may check it out.
AnkitaXOXO

[Mr. Malarkey]

Such vivid words. Captured the image of purest love in a summer's night, intimate and full of passion. I enjoyed reading this one. Very nice poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle and beautiful words shared.
" Gifts of water
drop unnoticed
upon warm skin...
their kiss undisturbed."
I did like the above lines. Warm Summer rain and a kiss. Utopia, maybe ambrosia? Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Richard🖌]

Well, TS,

The title, itself, is no less than a poetess and poet magnet.
Then, there's no better mix than Nature, its textures, hues, and human emotion to enhance a moment wrought in sensual timbre's sweet caress.
Very little is more powerful than well-writ Free Verse, when skillfully utilizing metaphor, imagery, spot-on line-breaks, and syntax that flows with unencumbered ease … a very pleasant read, indeed.
L2, edit "bare" to "bear". See other thoughtful critique in my message.

Thank you, TS, most gratefully for your generous review of my, "In Ache's Sea, Longing", and for sharing your fine poetic efforts here! ⁓ Richard 🍃