Lizzie

Writen for a contest, 120 word max. It was Lizzie Borden's birthday so I decided to have some fun.

The warm moist spray lightly coated her face once again. The thick slippery mist felt almost heavenly as it coated her. She loved that feeling. Never before had she done this so close to home, it was always away in the shadows. But she was home alone today and no one ever came out to the old shed anymore. She had all day to bask in the glorious spray of blood coming from little Suzie’s head. No little Suzie would never pull her pony tails again. A sound brought her back from her personal slice of heaven. Her parents called her from the house, they were home early. She pulled her ax from Suzie as they called again, “Lizzie”…

Author's Note

Like I said, contest rules were 120 words or less.

Reviews

[Jesse Przewoznik]

Very good for such a restraining text limit. I've looked at potential contests myself, and have personally all but given up on these lesser word caps. Like I said though, well done in all regards.

[JuliePetunia]

The lines "The warm moist spray lightly coated her face once again. The thick slippery mist felt almost heavenly as it coated her." could've had more variation, you're basically repeating yourself. Pretty good for a short story!