Chocolate Bar

I saw you with him today

And it killed me

Promenading down the street

Hand-in-hand

He was whispering in your ear

Making you giggle

Like I used to

You were flirting and flaunting

Your apparent happiness

I, hapless; happy-less

Watching with wistful eyes

You with him.

 

Your eyes alive with animation,

They sparkled like azure jewels

Set in their brackets of silver

As your subtly-toned eyelids fluttered

Like the graceful wings of a butterfly -

Your skin is as smooth chocolate

Dripping with tantalisation

Teasing my hungry eyes -

“Have a taste…”

Your lips; a cluster of cherries

Which taste of the sweetest juice

And you laughed, you blushed -

Like a strawberry infusion

To colour the chocolate cheeks -

As if you knew that I was watching

And enjoyed the torture…

 

Those eyes…

They once shone only for me

Those lips…

They once smiled only for me

That skin…

It once glowed only for me…

 

But now are for another

And I watched you walk down the street

But your beauty is wasted on him;

He guarded you like a wolf

Dragging his prey down from the hunt

He eyed you like a lion;

He stalked you like a cheetah

He laughed, but his eyes’ glint

Was that of a man who smells the dinner

And rubs his hands in anticipation…

 

Your beauty is wasted on his eyes;

Already I can see

He couldn’t wait

To unwrap his tasty, rich, delicious, new

Chocolate bar

And eat it all up in one gobble.

Reviews

[aviiar:))]

a big WOW..:))

[Luchia Noname]

oh my, i loved it :) it was amazing it felt like i was being sucked in nice job :)

[Hibah Shabkhez]

delightful as always.
But stop making the twist obvious in the heading. It kinda ruins the effect.

[M.Babu]

This was BLOODY brilliant bruh...the diction was superb and the flow was untouchable...the story was nice and the playfulness that i enjoy in your work was there in perfectly measured doses. Loved these parts:

"Your apparent happiness
I, hapless; happy-less"

"Your eyes alive with animation,
They sparkled like azure jewels
Set in their brackets of silver
As your subtly-toned eyelids fluttered
Like the graceful wings of a butterfly -
Your skin is as smooth chocolate
Dripping with tantalisation
Teasing my hungry eyes -
“Have a taste…”"

What a solid description that this piece hammered home.. this is another brilliant one!

~M.Babu~

[SINDE]

I see...for a piece as good as this that guy must have really gotten to you.
Your eyes alive with animation
They sparkled like azure jewels
Set in the brackets of silver
As your subtly-toned eyelids
fluttered
Like the graceful wings of a
butterfly...
The description throughout the poem was awesome.
NICE WORK.


I see...for a piece as good as this that guy must have really gotten to you.
Your eyes alive with animation
They sparkled like azure jewels
Set in the brackets of silver
As your subtly-toned eyelids
fluttered
Like the graceful wings of a
butterfly...
The description throughout the poem was awesome.
NICE WORK.