Drops of Mercury

Inspired by Train's 'Drops of Jupiter"...kinda

Now that she’s back in the atmosphere

With drops of Jupiter in her hair

And drops of mercury on her lips

The twinkling dance of stars in her hips

And little beads of poison on her kiss

I ask her about her stellar ramblings.

 

She took off into the sky one night

The stars were twinkling

The moon was bright

She spread her wings

And took her flight

 To find herself a star.

 

She said that gravity and I

To keep her earthbound had contrived

She said that I was like a weighty thing

That held her back from taking wing

“Just something,” she said, “you need to know.”

So I set her free and let her go.

 

So she took off and flew over the horizon

Coasted through the galaxy

And made her way across Orion

Flirted with white dwarves, danced with novas

And the brightest stars you ever set your eye on-

She partied with the stars but now she’s back.

 

Did you find him? Did you?

Out somewhere near Leo?

Somewhere along the Milky Way

Or down by Scorpio?

Do his eyes twinkle

Like the lights of gems are in his eye?

Did your heart find its twin

Somewhere around Gemini?

See, while you were out there

Looking for your star

I was just over here-

Shining.

 

 

Reviews

[Cogito Ergo Sum]

This is an amazing poem.very...happening.and the place? I can't think of any place else where drops of Jupiter land on one's hair, and people soar passed galaxies.It's where poets live.

[SINDE]

I'm lost for words 'cause you've said it all. I love the metaphors gracing this poem. 'Did your heart find its twin
Somewhere around Gemini?'
Witty lines as usual:]

[Red Brick Keshner]

I wonder if this could be put to music or structured as a song. It sure has certain qualities that will lend toward that treatment. Sure that the lady this is about is thrilled to have a poem written about and for her.

[Irena]

very good poem.. i like the flow and word choice and my favorite part is the second stanza
overall great read(: