Holes

Seems we men

Are constantly trying

To dig ourselves into holes

And into trouble.

 

We seek hoes

To dig our holes

With no other thought, or plan.

Some of us

Take to the task

With the first tool that we can.

 

Discretion’s a handy thing

Valued among the wise

Fools stick their appendages

Into any willing orifice.

 

Lust fans our desires

And smoke must follow fire -

We know all about sowing seeds,

But nothing about trees.

Reviews

[TLK]

A brief metaphor with a lot to say about our responsibilities for the future. The third stanza is what hit me hardest. I enjoyed the images proposed by the first stanza, and the half-rhyme, rhythm, and full rhyme of the second stanza is very compelling (almost like a sea shanty). However, it's the third stanza that produces the metaphor most strongly. It is then fully realised in the last stanza, most especially the last two lines.

Overall, it left me with the beginnings of an excellent question which will take me a lifetime to answer.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

Thanks...there's nothing better than someone understanding - and appreciating - a piece! Glad it got you thinking - we'll struggle with this question forever.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh this is great...the consequences of our actions...how seldom we give thoughts to those...

jacob

[Emily B]

i look forward to reading more of you, definitely :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Hi Alvin. I agree with TLK's commentary.

There is another possible interpretation that may not be apparent and that you, perhaps, did not intend. That is the metaphor/appendage of "nose", as in sticking our noses into another's business; often when it doesn't belong there and then being oblivious to the possible consequences, i.e., knowing "...nothing about trees."

However, I'm pretty sure this message is regarding unrestrained human lust, thoughtless procreation and the inevitable consequences. I observe/like that it doesn't bludgeon the reader but does make it's point by plucking at any recognition that might be contained within personal experience. Too, I think the judicious use of contemporary street-speak localizes and clarifies key aspects for a certain select audience. However, I must wonder about how many of that select group will ever lay eyes upon or fully understand the wisdom of your verse. More is the pity, unless this piece is self-reflective and of that we have no hint. No, I see rather see this piece as another example of a poet's powers of observation and of exuding a compassion of spirit that seeks release. Well done.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

Thanks for taking the time to read and review - glad you liked it! I'm hoping some, at least, of the 'select group' will get to see this.