A Secret Lover's Rant

a one-sided love situation.

I still remember 

The times we're together

Our days spent with glee,

Happiness in our eyes they can see.

But now, I wonder what had happened?

Sparkle in those eyes had faded

My longing for our great tomorrow

Became an eternity of sorrow.

Everything we've been through

Never meant something to you;

All those things I thought will last

Suddenly vanished within my grasp.

'Coz my love is yours to gain

But your heart still beats other girl's name;

Nothing will ever be the same

My heart shattered by your hurricane..

Author's Note

Just a part of my painful past. Hope you liked it.. :)

Reviews

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

"'Coz my love is yours to gain
But your heart still beats other girl's name;
Nothing will ever be the same
My heart shattered by your hurricane.."

This is definitely my favorite stanza. Though I would change only one thing. In the first verse you say "I still remember" (which suggests past tense) "The times we're together" (which suggests present tense). That made it a bit awkward to read for me.

Otherwise a good poem.

[Pax]

My heart shattered by your hurricane...i like these line
wonderful write.
i really enjoyed reading this..

[Kuhr Gred]

:) very much like it.. musashi :D

[Jed Sabffle]

hhhmmmmmmmmmmmm....
hahahaha xD
well, this is perfectly written. :D
the words have a great flow





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[Silent_Whispers]

Very heartful and endearing. Was very nice to read.

[Kim's Poems]

sad and so heartfelt, yoru rhymes were amazing as well.
Wonderful write

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we can't get we need and want. The thought and seeing them near can make the heart yearn and know pain. Your words told a story of a secret love. Those are the dreams we won't forget. Desires not fulfilled leave us wishing. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[MAC]

i like this...heartfelt and sad. it seems that you still want this and have a hardtime putting it in the past. excellent write.

[Thea]

I love the emotions you crafted here...Very well written...
"Everything we've been through
Never meant something to you"
Just poignant! But still, so beautiful...
Nice, nice!!! XD
Heehee! :)))
Keep it up!
^^

[Seshat Nidaba]

This was delicious, I really loved the line:

1. My longing for our great tomorrow

It made me feel like I want that hope that comes from a shared future. Very tangible.

[CrystalClear2010]

it makes you think that romance isnt worth it
at least theres hope at the end