We will never find forgiveness
in this house that we sometimes share
we emptied out our souls and pockets
on whatever that was there
Sad to say
there was never any real love here and no one really cared
what's done is done
Now that our home is completely bare
after today I hope you realize,
I’m gone
Blessings sometimes have thorns, and misery loves company
we can never repair the mess that we have made
since we can’t use our hands to hide the sun
It’s dam clear our life reeks of all the wrongs we have done
After today, you gotta know,
I’m gone
I've spent too many years at war with myself
my psychologist told me all this bullshit is just not good for my health
If I'm going to live in misery in this life
then I rather do it by myself and with out all this dam fuc#ing strife!
First of all I love the whole flow of this piece...smooth;
and the feel of frustration and determination is so vivid
that the reader can feel it...really like that!
Lastly I quoted the 2 lines below because they are poignant
and give so much impact to this piece...just awesome lines!
"Blessings sometimes have thorns,"
"And we can't use our hands to hide the sun"
Awesome lines!
Ouch. What a way to tell it off! It was almost lyrical. I half expected the computer to start playing the music to go with this! Nicely written of past wrongs and letting go. Thanks for sharing!
" I've spent too many years at war with myself
my doctor told me all this mess is just not good for my health
If I 'm going to live in misery in this life
then I rather do it by myself and with out all this strife! "
I can relate to this verse
Wonderful write
Ray
This is really good. It flows well and has just enough temperament to speak without screaming the message. I like your creativity in expression including the fonts that accent the message but keeps it poetic. Yes the message it clear...Your Gone. Nice write.
It's always nice to kiss misery goodbye
this poem was good, and it ended nicely
its sometimes better to walk away from things,
then to stay,
sometimes when you stay...
it makes a bad situation worse.
Good poem...
Such strong, deep, sad feelings and, so finely put.
God willing the future will bring smiles. Some experiences and memories should be stored away, forgotten, allowed to fade, especially if life is to be grabbed with both hands in the future. It's there for the living.
Wow! This is amazing, so intense and deep and conveying such a great feel!
The way you've ended it is really outstanding and I loved it the most...
your words area really powerful...Great work!
Nice job! your poetry always speaks to the soul, and has so much wisdom! that's what I love so much. Many can feel you on this one, ecspecially me. I dated a guy who put me down, who made my condition worse, and called me crazy all the time. And i immoculated it, beign the person I am, and then when he was gone I mended. And I did realize that certain people are just bad for each other, and bring out the worst. I am sure not the first woman he brought the worse out of, but overall, it made me hate myself. And i'm glad i realized that when he was "gone" I became who I am again, The Goddess I deserve to be!
great poem, with a message that touched my soul and helped me become introspective.
Strong stuff. Sad when life is like that and ends like that. But such is life. The poem is like a surgeon's knife making the final cut, though the cut is with words. There is a lot of life behind the poem.
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