I noticed three things when I was reading this piece.
1) When you mention how the nightmares just won't stop, you used the word seize. I believe you mean cease as in to stop.
2) When talking about waking up, you used to word headrest. I believe that you mean hardest.
3) When talking about how the nightmares won't stop, you said wont. I think you neglected or didn't notice the apostrophe. It's won't.
Thank you for listening to this grammatical and spelling review. On to things more philosophical. When you asked about who you were, I don't think the wording you used applies correctly. Accordingly, it would be a place. That's just a personal view, however a few people will agree. This poem is kind of abrupt. Your walking and then your on the ground, dying more like. It's very interesting. Although the abruptness definitely seems to add an air of mystery to this work. Nicely penned, thanks for listening.
Best regards,
Dell
being in that phase is actually being in a transition..
like i can say evolving .. i have gone through and i know how much it takes to get back ..
but i tell you, the best works in life are produced in these transitional phases ..
very nice work .. and very touching ..
I agree completely with Dell, I noticed those three errors as well. This is still a very beautiful and expressive piece, and I believe that you did a great job.
I noticed three things when I was reading this piece.
1) When you mention how the nightmares just won't stop, you used the word seize. I believe you mean cease as in to stop.
2) When talking about waking up, you used to word headrest. I believe that you mean hardest.
3) When talking about how the nightmares won't stop, you said wont. I think you neglected or didn't notice the apostrophe. It's won't.
Thank you for listening to this grammatical and spelling review. On to things more philosophical. When you asked about who you were, I don't think the wording you used applies correctly. Accordingly, it would be a place. That's just a personal view, however a few people will agree. This poem is kind of abrupt. Your walking and then your on the ground, dying more like. It's very interesting. Although the abruptness definitely seems to add an air of mystery to this work. Nicely penned, thanks for listening.
Best regards,
Dell
Hi. I'm Aurora. I just kinda write about anything at any time. If I have an idea I write it down and soon it blossoms. I like writing poetry and short stories mainly.
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