Misfits

We are the misfits of the world
As we present you our careless attitude
The new generation of delinquents
Who indulge ourselves with liquids
We are the weasel of illiterate
A good for nothing with potent disaster
We crave for unlimited rave
Night live is our ride to nirvana
Blaring sounds of our sexual pleasure
As protection is our least bother
Giving birth to the b*****d children
Society tagged us as troublesome virus
An infectious and vexatious breed
But the only thing that matters to us
Let have a good time among ourselves
Never the less with our despicable attitude
We will always update your news

Reviews

[Mai L Nissen]

You are highlighting some serious social issues. I don't know if this poem is targeting a particular age group, nationality or if this is a general observation everywhere? Or if this is a critic of society as for not encompassing a particular group of people - or perhaps even create this group that they simultaneous despise?

However, I recognise a lot of the images you present. I think a lot of people indulge in either drugs, alcohol or other activities that bring sensation as a form of escape from either emptiness or pain. You mention illiteracy and news in your poem that seems to juxtapose negative of this poem. I don't know how you intended for the poem to be read and I am unsure of how to interpret the to last lines. However, it still speaks to me :) Very vivid imagery with strong emotion underneath each sentence!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Mai for your review.
This is my general observation mainly targeting the youths. It all set of people who choose to be bad at the early age.
The last two lines is when their deeds goes out of hand and get caught by the law
It sad to see that what modern luxuries have secluded people's minds

[Confuser]

Chang: Society's morals have gone insane, you are right. The west (USA) media leads the cause in so many ways. It is shameful and so very sad, and it is the children that must pay. Children need love from both parents: And the girls, the casual sex; the spread of disease. It is horrible - something's gotta give. Thanks//Dale

[Terrence Chang]

Misfits are everywhere. Thank you soo much Dale for your kind review

[Confuser]

Don't mean to sound so judgement. I am truly concerned about society. SOOOO many things have changed for the worse; small changes for the better. Great job.

[Terrence Chang]

It not been judgemental but the fact that we need to understand

[Confuser]

Of course you are right. Tks. Have a great night.

[wordman]

well my friend you covered a lot of ground and I can hear my grand pa saying these things about a new generation

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Wordman

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Emily]

I thought of Rudolph the red nose reindeer right away, because you know when they go visit the island of misfits, or was it the island abandoned toys? Well I'm not for sure what they called them. But great poem! well done! Keep it up!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Emily.

[Moonie]

Very well said! The expression and the word choice is passionate and heartfelt. I enjoyed the nice stream of extremely vivid words one after the other. However I have some advice
#1 I noticed a few typos - "outselves" and "let" in the 3rd last line. Do you mean "ourselves" and "let's"... Also "an infectious..." in the 5th last line..........
I understand that many people donot like it if a reviewer mentions the typos, and I apologise if you found it quite petty.
#2 "Giving birth to the b*****d children" I think this can be changed to sound more vivid..
eg, perhaps "As protection is our least bother 
Birthing mother less b******s is routine" ...this is just a suggestion. You may try any other substitute as well, or keep the same one. It's your choice.

I really like your idea. Surely in this world, we all have been labelled as misfits. Who amongst us is not a misfit?? I love each and every line in this one, except the b*****d children one, as that didn't sound as vivid as all the other lines.
"Night live is our ride to nirvana 
Blaring sounds of our sexual pleasure "--favourite lines!!

And "Never the less with our despicable attitude 
We will always update your news " is perhaps the best way of sealing this one off.

Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem!!! :))

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo very very much Naomi. I am happy that you are helping me. And I will will take every of your words into consideration.

[Moonie]

You're very welcome, Terrence. It was a pleasure to read this poem. :))

[Jamestown]

Well written and delivered, you said it with honesty and truth!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much James for your kind and gentle review.