Loneliness

To the time when I was alone

I am lonely and I want to scream
To an extent that it shreds me apart
I am lonely and want jump into the ocean
To kill my loneliness in the vast water world

This loneliness is devouring me
Into the emptiness of deep void
Disintering my way to abrupt end
I am introverted towards social life

I am in desperation of belonging
Even if it is a company of a psycho
To run away into the deep dark desert
As sirens sings and eats my heart out

The only thing that I have is a chalice of tears
To drink my own sadness down with a spear
I am just an islander in the frozen sphere
As solitude of confines my memories with dear

As meadows failed to insulate my dreams
Which succumbed my existence with questions
Honing the experience of lost abilities
Will they ever be any compassion towards me

Road always lead us somewhere
But not always our destination
A set back that got away from home
As predictions are not premonition

Author's Note

This is a quickie thought hope to have a constructive criticism

Reviews

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

Terrence I really like that.. I felt the deep dark emotion off of that... But i don't know why you feel alone cuz you ain't.. Thats why you have friends right? ♥

[Terrence Chang]

No I am not lonely. It is just an entity of emotion that everyone had one in their lives

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

oh ok.. Sorry that make alot of sence.. well thank you for telling me that.. Now i feel real stupid..lol

[Terrence Chang]

No Tessa. I am offended but I am glad that you care for people

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

lol... I was just kidding.. i seem to do that alot..lol.. so please don't be offended..♥

[Terrence Chang]

I ment that I am not offended. Sorry for the misconception

[Tessa Danielle Guise]

its ok... i messaged you... so maybe we can talk & get to know each other..if you want to? lol ♥

[Ana B.]

A very impressive piece....i think each of us was there....loved it :)

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Ana. I hope very one enjoyed as much as I did.

[Emily]

I like that first line!
Great way to start a poem!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Emily.

[Jamestown]

Being lonely can really be tough especially psychologically, another
great piece, keep up the good work! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much James

[Confuser]

This is absolutely beautiful and so sad....It is great Chang and I love it...Thank you...Dale

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Dale for giving me such a lovely review

[Confuser]

You're welcome Chang....Dale

[ANTO]

The first stanza is truly a powerful start. Not a thing I would change there.

Terrence
A few typos or changes -
"company of psycho" - "a psycho" or "psychos" would be better
"is a chalice of tear " - you could write 'tears' here without forfeiting rhyme I feel.

A strong finishing stanza, I thought.
Good write on loneliness - that sentiment is definitely well conveyed here.
:)

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Anto for correcting my mistake I didn't even notice that. Thank you for helping

[ANTO]

My very great pleasure Terrence. :)

[wordman]

yeah I can relate to this,shot my self twice so far but then I remembered I had no bullets

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much wordman