A Soul Suicide

There was a wondering soul.

Who was looking at the earth,

wondering around it to find

which life like it like to possess.

Then the soul looked at a lady

and was charmed by her.

So the soul wondered around her,

to find out is it worth to be like her

The soul found out about this lady

That she is innocent but yet clever,

Extremely shy but yet very bold,

Generous yet very opportunist,

Happy but yet has sadness in her.

So the soul finally made up its mind

And went to the lords to ask

The soul humbly requested to the lords

"Master the creator of all,

I have a humble request to ask."

The lords asked what are the request

of the soul and it humbly replied

"I would like to meet a lady

in the world of the living called earth."

The lords smiled, looked at the soul

and responded to the souls quest,

To gain in the world of the living

one must sever all the ties and memories

that made it as a soul in world of it own

The soul thought for a while

But since the soul was so fixed,

That he agreed the lord's deal

So the soul made its preparation.

The lord said that once the ceremony

is done with time and effort.

The soul will be transferred into a body

And will be waiting until the process

of birth has taken its place

Alas the soul is now born as a baby.

But now since all his memory and bonds

Are severed he now forgot his purpose.

Why did he came in the world of the living?

And now how destiny ridicules at him

Though he brought the same lady several time,

He could not recognize the lady at all.

But the lord and destiny thought about

What a foolish request this soul has made.

If perhaps the soul could have waited for her,

The lady will eventually passed away.

And that lady's soul would come back

From another break of life of living

Then both of them would have all eternity

to understand each other in more comforts

Author's Note

An old write of mine. It was written in my college days

Reviews

[ANTO]

Damn this is really good Terrence. The concept is top-notch inventiveness.
"to gain in the world of the living
one must sever all the ties and memories
that made it as a soul in world of it own " - really buzzed by this - fair play to you

"Why did he came in the world of the living?
And now even destiny laugh at him
though destiny brought the lady to him,
he could not reconize the lady at all. " - OMG! I laughed at this and hurt my shoulder - your fault Terrence !! My lawyers will be in touch

"But the lord and destiny thought about
What a foolish request this soul has made." ... but they didnt remedy it ! Very sadistic Destiny and the other dude were I feel.

Apart from No happy endings this is class ! :)

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you Anto for your review and soo sorry about your shoulders. Please don't send a lawyer. Hahahahahaha
Destiny is sadistic and grim.

[Emily]

I like it!
Nice meaning!
Well done!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Emily.

[Confuser]

Chang: I liked it very much: it is deep and raw; the changing of soul to find another is well expressed and also sad, but I suppose we don't get to make choices about where and who we will be. The theme is well expressed. I like the way you developed the character of the "soul" and the request - it is a very good story/prose writing and the adage is we cannot choose our destiny; the title of A Soul Suicide is wonderful and the foolish request is well defined. Thank you. Dale

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo very much Dale

[Confuser]

You're welcome Chang!! Keep writing:....:D

[wordman]

and that's why he is the ruler of the universe he is a wise man
a intriguing write

[Terrence Chang]

Yeah he is.

[Jamestown]

What an amazing and completely enjoyable read!
Creativity oozing out of this piece, I could see this as a very
successful short story! Well written top to bottom, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much for your gentle review James.