Sandman

What dreams do

I am dream
I am the wonder
I fight reality
I bring illusion
I bring fate and hope
But beware of my nightmare
For it is an everlasting cold
That leaves a scar
But once you wakeup
I take my leave
And close the door

Author's Note

Hope you enjoy reading it

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Dreams are powerful. Nightmares are powerful, too. We can embrace them or flee from them. I like the concept, sir...

[Terrence Chang]

thank you soo much Sami for your kindness

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Closing Thoughts]

I really enjoyed this poem. It's an interesting concept, and cool personification of sleep. My only suggestion would be for the line, "I take your leave,". Usually one doesn't take another person's leave. They would take their own leave. So it would properly read, "I take my leave". However, if you desired to have him address the subject, it could say, "I take my leave of you" or something. Just a suggestion. Anyway, it was short and sweet. Nice job. Thanks for sharing!

[Terrence Chang]

Hmm. I never thought of it that way. Thank your your suggestion

[Magnus]

Grammar correction first: I am dream, I thought it was suppose to be, I am a dream and for I take your leave I thought I take my leave is what it should have been! Overall its a very nice one thanx for the recommendation!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you Magnus. Thank you for rectifying my grammar. I didn't realize that silly mistake.

[Terrence Chang]

I will keep that in mind try write next one more carefully

[Confuser]

I did enjoy reading it! It is very good, flowed so well and the ending wonderful - you write very well. I would only make a tiny suggestion with "the" in the first line, but it is yours and the imagery was wonderful also. I quickly was lead to a finality that gave me chills. Please keep writing. I am very impressed. Thank you.

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo very much. I am glad that you like it

[Confuser]

It is quite good...................................Dale

[Terrence Chang]

dale? Sorry I didn't get you

[Confuser]

Nothing, just liked your writing. Thank you. And with my writing, Believe, I so most wanted YOU to believe, you are a Miracle! Keep writing.

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you Confuser

[Confuser]

Y/W Chang. Read, Stonz poetry, it will blow you away. A great to learn. There are so many great writers here.

[Terrence Chang]

I will definitely also read his work. But now I need to leave cause its 5.30 in the morning and I haven't slept yet.

[Terrence Chang]

Also I you can send me his link so that I can find it easier.

[Confuser]

Look on my friends list, you'll see his name. But read his bio - he's very serious writer. Thanks. When I first read one of his poems, I'll look it up, wow, blew me away.