Ocean Soul

I had this dream thought I would share it.

I fell into the ocean and I could not swim
I was drowning in the vast ocean
As my light began to fade
I see a mermaid swimming by
She cames near and kisses me
I could feel my lips touching her lips
As she kissed I could breathe in the water
She was the most beautiful creature I have ever seen
But she left right away as soon as we kissed
I swam across the oceans and seas
In search of that beautiful being
After ages of searching I see her again
She hasn't changed a bit and her beauty remains pure
She was sitting beside a dead body and it was me
I realized that I have given my soul in the vast ocean

Author's Note

What do you think

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"her beauty remains pure
She was sitting beside a dead body and it was me
I realized that I have given my soul in the vast ocean"

As you celebrate the soul as this vast ocean that needs to be explored, you call for the searching to begin within. This was wonderful...:).....................

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you Soo much Sami

[Jamestown]

This is awesome, I really enjoyed this piece, well written, PTL!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much James

[Jamestown]

Of course, after church, I will be reading more for sure, b-blessed my friend:)

[Terrence Chang]

Peace be with you and thank you once again

[Olly]

Very nice, I loved the ending and the thought of giving your soul to the vast ocean!

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you soo much Olly

[Confuser]

Great: I loved the story Terrance. "You took the words right out of my mouth, it must have been while you were kissing me." - Meatloaf. Thought of those song lyrics. I did enjoy it; great surprise ending: *I'll try my best to get to your story this weekend. Thought of enchanted, or mysterical kiss -- and rhyming with bliss, I don't know. Just am amazed at your imagination. You will become a great writer if you keep it up. Thank you. Dale

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you Dale this means a lot to me.

[Confuser]

You really surprise me to be so young and come up with great poetry! Keep writing.

[Terrence Chang]

Thank you Dale. It is all because people like you who encourage me to do something. Micro or macro everything is a blessing

[Confuser]

Y/W.....great writing!