Time For Revolution

Trigee...very challenging...read the poem on the left, then the one on the right, then read left to right for three poems in one. I have compounded the difficulty by using the acrostic form. I have also included poetic device of alliteration.

For while we sleep they pillage...................As our families are attacked;
And Where is our outrage,.........................Their offenses are overwhelming;
The founding fathers reviled such...............Evil and injustice and added to that are
Countless violations of our freedoms,...........other vehement lawless deeds,
And finally taxing us to poverty..................with prêt ell a lack of representation
They will again incite revolution.................of the people, by the people and for the people.
 

Author's Note

This is very challenging I would rather not have it rated...sorry.

Reviews

[JudyC]

This is great--the acrostic is a good idea. Even though there are three poems in one, it all flows well, and each poem is equally effective--how did you do it? I especially like the last line: "of the people, by the people, and for the people." We do need to go back and read the words of our founders. Your poem touches on so much of what they wrote and spoke about. Nice work!

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I can see how challenging this was. It is also very good and exceptionally clear. And it is the clarity that I should think might have been most difficult especially with # 3.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Very nice piece! Best of luck with the contest! I thought that the 3 for the price of one deal was really interesting and well implemented!

Keep up the good work!

Peace and love,
Gabe

[Legion]

Damn fine write. Hope you win. You brought up some rather interesting perspectives in this. I think you might like my poem "A Letter For King George". Check it out when you get a chance. Kudos to you and this write.

[Emily Elizabeth]

VERY TRUE! As a marxist I agree with this completely. As usual, you're a professional writer in every sense of the word- you write beautifully, the flow is perfect and you're not afraid to experiment! Such an intelligent and deep poem, and it's so clever the way it's done! I can imagine it must be very hard to write something like this, but you've made it seem effortless here!
Thanks so much for sharing!

[Constance]

I love the message, and the work's beautiful wording. You did an excellent job with the form-spawn of your own making. :) I certainly hope some others will try this. I do see that you didn't alliterate as much as I did... which would have made your poem sillier, and therefore not as nice. I like it.
It's frightening how our nation is changing before I eyes... the rest of the world, too. All of the means of separation are evident to me, how the media makes us hate one another and thereby keeps us from shining the light on them. That's what my goal is... to pull the wool from just a few eyes, day by day. It could be such a wonderful world, if all would just open their eyes enough to make it happen.
You did well at making me think, obviously. I'm starting to ramble. I only ramble in my reviews of the poems I like best. High five!