Sonnet on a Star

Love endures eternally

Sonnet on a Star

If I could write a sonnet on a star,

then bottle it and toss it to the sea,

would it travel to the corners of the earth

and echo there the love I hold for thee?

If I could write a sonnet on the moon,

then bottle it and toss it to the winds,

would it find your heart so you may briefly know

where your love ends is where my love begins?

If I could write a sonnet on the sun,

then bottle it and toss it throughout time,

would someone from a distant galaxy

find no greater love than what was mine?

Yet, I cannot write a sonnet on a star,

nor moon, nor even on the blazing sun,

nor bottle words to send them where you are,

nor coerce our separate hearts to beat as one.

And so my darling, you will never hear

the humble words of love I wrote for thee,

they remain encrypted, tightly sealed

and; yet, they travel on eternally.

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Tamara... Your Sonnet is lovely as Violets ...
so sweet as feelings fade in the Firmament...
A bouquet to treasure as pressed upon your heart. gently, Pat

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Sorry this reply has taken so long. I don't keep up with too much poetry anymore. I appreciate your reply. Thank you kindly. :-)

[An owl on the moon]

A beautifully tender song of life and love. Your words have a depth and longing in them. May they reach the heart of your love's presence as eternal music.

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Thank you kindly for your feedback. I appreciate your effort.

[Chris Shaw]

Very nicely written. Flows and rhymes well. An accomplished piece of poetry Tamara. All good wishes.

Chris

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Thank you kindly, Chris. I appreciate your feedback. :)

[Dinesh Kumar]

nicely written i enjoyed reading it....
wonderful piece

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Thank you Dinesh. I appreciate your feedback. :)

[Neville]

If I could write a sonnet on a flower
I would write a verse upon a petal every hour
and if I could write a sonnet on a tree
I would write one occasionally for thee.... However, I have never written one in me life, so I think you are quite safe my friend.... kind regards & much respect... N

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Thanks Neville for your fine poetic response.

Actually, "Sonnet on a Star" was an answer to a Pulitzer nominee's poem a few years ago (a sonnet as wekk). Wish I could post his poem. He wrote to me stating he would keep my poem in his personal papers and would always treasured it.

I suspect he threw it into File 13 :)

[Neville]

my pleasure... I dunno.. I bet he kept it... just hope it does not turn up somewhere with his name on it....

[Robowriter]

It's like my heart is crying but in a good way, this is wonderful!

[Tamara Beryl Latham]

Thank you, Robowriter, for reading and offering feedback. I appreciate it. :)