A White Dress

I saw a perfect shade of white

So elegant

That it must have been a figment

So elegant

Thump, Thump, Thump, Thump

Says the heart in my chest

When it sees you

The way it lays on you

Is stellar and sublime like the clouds in the sky

A white dress so perfect

That it blinds me with your radiating fairness

The whiteness of a soul

Is a cool shade of grey compared to your beauty

Tremble, Tremble

My knees are now dancing 

In your presence 

A rare sparkling jewel you are

Gleaming brightly

Like a white sun parting the clouds

Gleaming brightly 

Reviews

[MsJewel]

The whiteness of a soul
Is a cool shade of grey compared to your beauty
To be in love makes everything more beautiful. The comparison here is lovely Trevor and the last verse is stunning.
My new favorite by you. You have touched my heart with the beauty of your words.
:) Julie

[Trevor Barnett]

Wow! I'm thrilled you enjoyed this write! Thank you so much for the review Julie.

[Traci]

Absolutely beautiful Trevor, each line speaks volumes of the love you feel for her.
My new favorite by you, sweet man. Lovely work as always.

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you so much Tracey for the wonderful comment!

[Spacecadet]

Pure and burning with passion, this poem makes for a refreshing read with the unconventional flow but it fit so well as to get your thoughts across :)

[Trevor Barnett]

I'm glad you liked it, and thanks so much for taking the time to comment on it!

[@zeewhykay]

This is not really a review buddy, but just a word of appreciation to this great piece. We are always happy when we know someone has read and felt our piece. Well done friend.

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you for the wonderful comment Yann! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

and with this piece...
the lines have just enough...
to allocate the lines...
and give in more as the words...
present themselves...
about the subject matter of affection...

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you very much for for your patience for all of your reviews! I'm thrilled you enjoy my writing!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You're welcome...Its the persistence in me...I want to learn more...and see what others are crafting...

[Trevor Barnett]

Well, you'll definitely learn a lot that way my friend! I can't wait to return the favor, and learn my self!

[maria ( rose)]

Trevor, awesome read Well done!

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you very much Maria! I'm glad you liked it, and I look forward to reading your work.

[maria ( rose)]

your welcome! and yes, stop by anytime would love to hear from you.
-maria

[Trevor Barnett]

Will do Maria!

[A. Amos]

This is really well done:) great work

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you very much A. Amos! I look forward to reading your work.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my friend

[SANDEEP SHETTY]

I liked the lines. Sure say it to a girl...she will never say no....lol!!

[Trevor Barnett]

Hopefully she wouldn't lol! Thank you for the review!

[Sami Khalil]

"A rare sparkling jewel you are

Gleaming brightly

Like a white sun parting the clouds

Gleaming brightly;

You are gleaming brightly as a poet and a lover. beautiful...:).................

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you very much Sami! I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for taking the time to review!

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)....................