Atlas

The greatest illusion is stillness 

Numb to the sense of spinning on this Atlas stone

Unaware of twirling on a celestial clock

We are a mere blemish on a cog

In this device of time

Atlas are you unable to rest?

Put your burden down and for a moment be still

Let us be immortal like gods of olympus 

Give us strength to defeat this titan

Our adversary time

Take us back

To relive our dear bliss

The moments that linger in our minds

They're the fabric that make up the soul

Turn time into oblivion with sweet scents of anodyne

Atlas chooses to carry his stone

Striding to his never ending destination

The cruel paradox that ends our short bleak lives

This colossal does not rest or sleep

It's intangible time 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I come back to read this wonderful write...:)...........

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you Sami I'm glad you came back to read!

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)......................

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

I'm enthralled by all the references to Greco Roman mythology that you have made here

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you for the wonderful comment Speedy Hobbit, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Development of this one...
creates a more philo representation...
as I read the entire...
time is irrelevant...
yet focuses on what is made...
as we go through life itself...

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you for the much appreciated comment Glen! Thanks for stopping by.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

you're welcome...I actually started from the back and made my way to your present title...

[Trevor Barnett]

I noticed, and thanks for your time and dedication!

[Avoiry]

Time is relative. As for Atlas fate it can only repeat and no moment can be kept as sacred. Very well put.

[Trevor Barnett]

Absolutely, and thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it; therefore, thank you for taking the time to review it!

[Sami Khalil]

Take us back

To relive our dear bliss

The moments that linger in our minds

They're the fabric that make up the soul

Turn time into oblivion with sweet scents of anodyne

[Trevor Barnett]

I like that stanza too, especially the last line.

[Sami Khalil]

Me too...You are welcome...:)............

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Is about something that is trying to say

I confess without shame that I have the intention
to hijack your dreams
if no exceptions being the only invader

[Trevor Barnett]

It's really about going back to our favorite moments in time, and how time we're given is not enough. But, everyone else will have a different perspective on it who reads it. I like the verse style comment!

[Bob Sherunkle]

Very deep.Makes me think...which is unusual! Great write Trevor

[Trevor Barnett]

Well, I'm glad you enjoyed Bob.

[Sami Khalil]

The title , the poem were all good and well written...Thank you for sharing...:).......................

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......................

[MsJewel]

Well written and quite thought provoking. Your talent shines in this piece Trevor.

:) Julie

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you very much Julie! This is quite a brain teaser lol!

[Raymond Federle]

Very, very cool. This is my kind of stuff. Excellent! :)

[Trevor Barnett]

Thank you very much Raymond! I look forward in reading your work.