Perspective

Perspective

A Poem by Trevor Barnett

I'm in a land where everyone is dying
Sweet child please awake
I look up at the sky screaming, crying
God, why do you take!
What's the reason for living in this world without my baby?

I'm in a store where everyone is buying
I've got a headache
My child is loud, and is quite defying
Tom for heaven's sake!
Just get the damn toy he wants so he will shut up, just maybe?

My parents are dead, not here anymore
I sell my bare flesh
They've labeled me sinner, scarlet, a w***e
Malice thoughts, a thresh!
My face is bruised and bloody from the stones of licentious men

My parents are stupid, I slam my door
We just do not mesh
I hear the knocks, but I choose to ignore
The night air feels fresh!
I'll show them, I'm running away from home; what will they think then

Today is my birthday and I turned eight
It's time to be tough
I get my gun and go fight for my state
It's scary and rough
It hurts to breath in, It's so cold and dark; I want my mommy

Today is my birthday and I'm out late
I've not drank enough
Bartender another drink I feel great
Wow, I am hot stuff
I stumble to their table, I vomit like a tsunami

© 2013 Trevor Barnett


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Many layers in this piece and I have to say you truly pulled it well, congrats

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the wonderful comment, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
cause and effect...
in the lines...
gets at you as a reader...
and gives the view...
at point blank range...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Your wonderful reviews are much appreciated here Glen! Thanks for taking the time to review.
Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

you're welcome...keep up the good work...
this is awesome! I like the run away.perspective best was an interesting read. keep writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much, and you too!
awesome transfering from thought to thought! I like it really!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Well, thank you very much NonameRa!
This was a wonderful write. I wholly enjoyed it...:)..................

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow! You have written with such depth and emotion in this story/poem. Your images and emotions felt real to me.

Brilliant writing my friend.
:) Julie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Julie! I'm really glad you liked it.
You change perspectives throughout your poem very smoothly.....everything works so well together. Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much!!!
I love how you change perspectives throughout the poem, and I absolutely adore the differentiating emotions and feelings! This was spectacular! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Rosie! Sometimes people just forget what's going on in this world.
Brilliant Trevor,very sad but a small insight into how some ones life turned out.Great write

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Trevor Barnett

10 Years Ago

Thanks, much appreciated Bob!

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Trevor Barnett
Trevor Barnett

Glencoe, AL



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My name is Trevor Barnett; and, writing is a hobby of mine. My true passion is art; that being said, I will be attending Savannah School of Art and Design(SCAD) this fall for animation. If there's any.. more..

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