garden-garage

and as divine amber-shine clouds ceased to show, 

beckoning stars did take their place - 

he felt her pain as he kissed her lips,

returned twenty days before.

and while frozen nightly breezes swayed, the air

walking past; they took refuge, in slight less warmth 

than others had, together, their two bodies.

leant in such combined ways, chin warmth upon her hair

burying repression to his chest 

till flesh revealed, her now

second love.  

 

 

Reviews

[Dane Osborne]

A wonderfully written piece. To me this doesn't make a statement so much as it expresses a moment in time, which is a good thing. THis made me feel rather than think which can be refreshing. And the opening line was amazing.

and as divine amber-shine clouds ceased to show,
beckoning stars did take their place -

If you decide to change anything about this poem then please do not change that. Well done.

[Nobody.]

ok...sunset..night time..connection...winter....two wounded people share themselves...good but not great....just a caress to tide her over until someone else arrives.

sad. again. beautiful and sad.

[Wondering Mind]

18 weeks later?
Without pretending that I understood this backyard love... I enjoyed the words much.