Frozen, Love?

surely, it'd be over now

that sinking ship, divulged into speck-ice pungent ocean 

chills

quick glance, stop, nano ice-crystal bergs form in red-blue blood,

chilling vein case taken a hold of your breaths. try and breathe for me love,

she said. 

Author's Note

I agree, 'cool' didn't go... although I wanted it at the time

Reviews

[Stammers]

Gah, I'm in love with this, such a beautiful image, the only problem I had was the wording of

'divulged into speck-ice cool ocean
chills'

I guess in a shorter piece things notice more, I think cool doesn't fit right, and ocean chills sounds better, maybe I'm reading it wrong. Devastating write all the same, going into my favourites.

[Stammers]

Yes! I think it works much better, perfection on your part.

[Wondering Mind]

chilling, indeed.