Last Breath

Losing the will to live

Wondering when my heart will give

Always ran out of choices

Always listening to the voices

This life is never fair

Sometimes its to hard to bare

With my heart i gave to you

You stabbed it through and through

As my dreams fade to gray

So shall my life go away

With my mind in wonder

Was my soul to plunder

Finally i close my eyes

Waiting on my surprise

Heaven or Hell

Only God will tell

Reviews

[awaken_the_darkness]

This reminds me of my writing style (not so much content.) Well, my past writing style, since I haven't written anything in years. Anyways, Don't let your heart break, because if it broke your heart, it wasn't love but only a shadow of what could have been love. Sometimes the heart and soul are easily fooled and see something there only because they want to see it, not because it's really there. The real thing will find it's way and you will wonder why in the world you got yourself to this point. Keep up hope as much as possible. It's one of the stitches in life. -llj.

[DarknessPeering]

The flow is unhindered. Full and bitter sweet.

[Shy Girl]

It reads like a diary of sorts. Sad entry and in quandrum...am I good and deserve love...or am I wicked and not worthy. (just a guess from my head there :) I liked the flow and steady cadance throughout. But it gave me a last gasp of breath feel... just as your title describes...well done. I liked "Finally I close my eyes" awaiting your "Last Breath". Well named piece. :)

[Syphx]

well it started as a diary verse and ended up like this. I would say its a little of both i want love but i do not deserve it. Im glad it touched you the way it did.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

wonderful poem...I loved the last li es especially well done :-)