When Man Plays God

Though mine among the millions,
still I do not own this child.
The core of stone or mist
released this night
to stand along the ramparts
long ago upraised to serve
one cause alone,
demarking truth from void.

 

For art is higher than the noblest vision.
It is our sustenance,
our nostrum for decay, indeed,
but more!
It is the centrifuge of breathing dust
that found a universe beyond itself,
and then another just inside its own,
in equal whirling splendor...
in tune with sirens
singing in the soul!
                 ~~

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Written by someone who clearly knows himself rather well, I like the duologue with a higher path, which you have craftily penned here, great writing.

[TL Boehm]

one cause alone,
demarking truth from void.

For art is higher than the noblest vision.
It is our sustenance,
our nostrum for decay, indeed,
but more!
It is the centrifuge of breathing dust
that found a universe beyond itself,

Oh my goodness that is beautiful and deep writing.

[Dean]

but what does it say?--utter confusion, I guess. Thanks.
"Stage play?" I think not.

[TL Boehm]

To me it speaks of the deeper things - the twist in the DNA or flash in the dendrites that drives artists to create beyond themselves. To paint, to write - to leave a legacy. I will leave a lot of scribbled on paper but legacy? Nope. I'm a wannabe. I just can't stop. Writing is my addiction. That and nachos. I only wish I were brilliant like this poem.

[Dean]

Thank you, but do not sell yourself short. I have no corner on brilliance

[L.Edward]

A solid dose of mysticism there. Beautifully wrought!

[Dean]

I guess I am a mystic at heart. Someday I'd like to be a poet

[L.Edward]

Indeed. You are very much the poet already!

[Dean]

Don't know that I agree with you, but I am grateful to you!

[Mark]

Mist or stone... demarking truth from void. Strong imagery with a touch of ancient in it.

[Leslie Philibert]

You do very well here. I`m not too sure why it is a stage play, but you could use it as a refrain in the way Greek drama does. Nice one.

[Dean]

No intention of a stage play. Thanks

[Dean]

Thank you for seeing that art can lead us. It is magical

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

For art is higher than the noblest vision. -- such an apt statement. I think this is a hopeful piece, but there is a sense of something deeper here. I see the shreds of the "sustenance" that you write of written in starlight...so beautiful, Dean. You always have such a great way of connecting scenes together.

[Sami Khalil]

If I'm not mistaken you are questioning yourself ( this child within ) in relationship to your Creator and all the void or chasm between both and how to bridge the great divide between man and The Lord of all...You want your soul to sing in joy of its faith and the hope of the future. My take on it and I commend you for this awesome write sir ...:)

[Dean]

Thank you, Sami

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure , sir...:)

[Marie]

There are certainly worlds outside and inside worlds...an infinity...
But I don't think art can be higher than vision, because without vision there is no art.

[emmajoy]

The words are beautifully laid, but i need to read this more than twice to slide between the layers. Are 'we' talking of creating another and new word from thought, from imagination, then displaying it on life's stage or perhaps a stage. I'm speaking aloud, more hypothesis than .. The work's like your child, it has to fly, be seen. Won't rate for now, but, i will, be sure of that.

[Dean]

You are perfectly right to question If a piece does not stand well on its own, what good is it?read moreYou are perfectly right to question If a piece does not stand well on its own, what good is it?

(I like you hiding there--between the sheets)

[emmajoy]

It's not the piece that fails to stand well, Dean - far from it.. it's my brain and only that. Will keep returning until the light stays on.

[Dean]

You are being charitable, but you need to realize the value of what you say. I prize it, and indeed it is what I look for in readers--else how would I improve.