Wish

I feel the frantic rhythms

 

The rhythms of his heart

 

As I lay there with my head across his blood soaked chest

 

I feel the slowing of his breath

 

I try to hold back my tears

 

As he draws his last ragged breath I hear a voice

 

What is your wish Child?

 

What?

 

I am the Goddess of Wishings. Tell me your wish.

 

Let him live!

 

That I can not do.

 

Then kill me. I am nothing with out him.

 

As you wish

Reviews

[Joiedevivre]

This is exactly how i feel about my cat! Very nice.

[Sukriti Suki]

a nice imagery and a good start..I would chose another way of saying ' Goddess of wishings' and in the second last sentence' With out' should be without space..

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

aww.. makes me wanna cry!

[TheUnforgivinFallenAnge..]

Dramatic

[Daydreamer54]

Wow, i love how dramtic this was and i love the imagery you created. i think this would be a good excerpt for a book. awesome job! ^^