Gales of the Wind

He had quietly drifted like a sailboat

in the turbulent gales of the wind

 Sunset vanished within tears of her eyes,

as salty breezes kissed her skin~

 

She sat upon the dock of disbelief

as the moonlight took her hand,

as the discontented waves

crashed upon the ivory sand~

 

The shadows of the past linger

as lavender twilight appears,

and their footprints upon the beach

are now embedded in her tears.

 

©SyberRose

 

 

 

Author's Note

thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

Love the imagery Rose, well done

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Rene and happy you enjoyed this piece...Rose:)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You have concisely told this rather powerful story, which is what I especially appreciate about this piece, great.

[SyberRose]

thank you Sheema...i'm glad you enjoyed it...Rose:)

[Cassie]

"As the moonlight took her hand" Loved this line. The whole poem is superb as usual. hugs hugs my dear friend

[SyberRose]

thank you and hugs to you Cassie dear...Rose:)

[Einstein Noodle]

thank God for the moonlight... exquisite...precise and so very emotive...love this poem..wonderful job!
E.

[SyberRose]

Thank you E...and i'm happy you enjoyed this piece...appreciate your nice comments...Rose:)

[Michael G. Smith]

Very romantic piece. On third last line what if as was removed and it read Twilight Lavender appears. The as kind of says its beginning to happen, but without it saying it is happening. I know its a minor thing that just the flow jumped a little there while I was reading.

[SyberRose]

Thank you M.G...I appreciate your input...ill have to look at it again...thanks for peeking in tonight:)

[Sami Khalil]

Such sadness , melancholy , longing in your words but such beauty of hope and your words...Splendidly written...:)

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Sami as always...so nice to hear from you this morning...Rose:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Great imagery and personifications used here. The word play is also clever. Sad and sentimental. Simply beautiful, SyberRose! :x

[SyberRose]

thank you Blue...and happy you enjoyed...Rose:)

[Frieda P]

Such a sad tune being played here, with your usual flair though Rose.

"She sat upon the dock of disbelief"

Love that line, and I've been on that dock many times, great read.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Frieda...and thanks for peeking in this evening...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

A sad song plays in this poem, Rose - the shadows of the past never fully disappear... Very nicely done!

[SyberRose]

Thank you Rita for peeking in tonight...appreciate it...Rose:)

[Lydia Shutter]

The melancholy reminiscing in this one is so emotive, Rose. Loved the personification of the breeze and the moonlight. So many of us have found a place to sit on "the dock of disbelief" at some point in our lives. Beautifully written. Lydi**

[SyberRose]

Thank you Lydi...yes thats for sure...i'm happy you enjoyed this piece...Rose:)