Sandcastle of Love

collaboration with an old friend.

We walked along each gentle beach
Once covered in sands of love
Our footprints left a paired impress
Warmed by the sun above ~

We packed the scoops of firm wet grains
With laughing playful skill
Until we had a castle built
To hide our passion’s thrill~

A salty zephyr kissed our skin
In sands of amber stars
The song of glimmer in our eyes
Within strings of wind’s guitar~

Faint ocean whispers in moonlight
Softly crept along the shoals
A pharos lit waves of passion
In heartbeats of two souls~

By

SyberRose and friend Greymouser

Author's Note

Pharos is a tower with a light warning ships of nearby shoals

Reviews

[Michael G. Smith]

This brings about a fondness within for past loves and their good memories.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Mike and for peeking in tonight...Rose

[Cassie]

I love this one, thank you for sharing.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much and i'm happy you enjoyed dear Cassie...hugss

[Danomaly1983]

Such wonderful descriptions of sand, sand castles and a walk on the beach :) The salty zephyr was a nice touch, I could vividly imagine this beach and the wind in my face. Nice one, Rose and Greymouser :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you Dan and i'm glad you enjoyed this piece...Rose:)

[richom]

Your review of my poem led me to your site, and I'm delighted to find another writer of rhymed, metered verse. Aside from its excellent construction, this is an exceptional poem because of your outstanding phrasing and imagery. "A salty zephyr kissed our skin in sands of amber stars." Poetry doesn't come much better than that. Describing a grain of sand as an amber star--marvelous. I'm looking forward to reading your previous postings. Richard

[SyberRose]

thank you so much Richard and for visiting this afternoon...Rose:)

[Frieda P]

A bit of a different read from your pen Rose, muchly enjoyed your sea drenched musings here.

A salty zephyr kissed our skin
In sands of amber stars
The song of glimmer in our eyes
Within strings of wind’s guitar~

You knew I'd love that stanza! Lovely as always.

[SyberRose]

thank you Frieda...it was a collaboration...from years ago with a friend...from another forum..lost contact with him and wish he would find this place...:)

[Frieda P]

Perhaps your words will travel into the ether and he'll find his way, my pleasure! :-)

[Distantview123]

A very nice poem, full of romantic expression. Thank you for sharing. ~ Robert.

[SyberRose]

Thank you for taking time to visit today...Rose:)

[Me]

What a stunning read Rose, you both did an amazing job :) x

[SyberRose]

Thank you Raven Louise...i'm glad you enjoyed it...Rose:) hugs

[B-poet]

Your writing is getting better & better. The richness of your passionate words deserve their own special genre publication as a whole. Great work SyberRose. A classic write & read. :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you BP...and for taking time to read tonight...Rose

[Tom]

A beautiful collaboration it indeed turned out to be, so sweet and dreamy aided by all that fetching imagery down by the seaside as two lovers stroll along in playful bliss!

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Tom and so nice of you to visit tonight...Rose:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Our footprints left a paired impress
Warmed by the sun above...

I just love this image... Your poem has me walking on the beach with my love - beautiful!

[SyberRose]

Thank you Rita...glad you enjoyed this piece...Rose:)