Cherry on Top

Silly Poem

Sometimes love changes with time
but the love I have for you
still smoothly flows like a rhyme

Sometimes wishes are too much to ask
maybe I don't deserve
but fantasies and memories of past

Life is but a song a dance till the end
than walking away
only looking back now and then

I wanted to share chocolate ice cream
or your favorite vanilla bean
sharing it with you in my dreams

But you always wanted the cherry on top
I felt like a miscellaneous item
in a novelty shop

Love still flows like sweet Hershey syrup
upon rocky mountains of love
sugar and spice and everything nice
and always a double dip of me for you.

 

©SyberRose

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

i am a little conflicted in reading as your speaker feels used (as we men often seem like) but then offers double dips in closing .. your opening "rhyme" with "time" is well used (as i am sure you are aware) in this case for me it begs something more original ...3V 2L a small typo maybe .."than" should be then ;) your poem has a strong metaphor that sustains throughout ..and it is deliciously romantic ... tantalizing pic!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Great metaphor in this one! The rhyming is wonderful and a bit innocent. I enjoyed this very much. Lydi**

[SyberRose]

thank you so much Lydia...and nice to see you this afternoon too...:)

[Jack...]

This was sweet, sticky, gooey, delicious, delightful, loaded in calories and the perfect desert for today. Very nicely done my friend.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Jack...glad you enjoyed...and thank you for your visit...always appreciated...:)

[Ency Bearis]

Cute and sweet poem I like the way it's presented - clever.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Ency...nice to hear from you...Rose:)

[s y e]

That cherry is mine, lol, kidding! Loved the wording and imagery, awesome job.

~ Noodle.

[SyberRose]

haa...no its mine ha...i love cherries.:)

[Soma-ko]

Haha, it isn't that silly. Makes me think of someone reminiscing about the past in a fond way. My favorite is a root beer float, though I personally don't like cherries much. Fun write, and much enjoyed. :)

(Also, on line 9, do me mean 'then' instead of 'than'?)

[SyberRose]

Yes we did haa thank you dear...I appreciate your comments always...Rose:)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rose. A lovely poem about a true loving relationship that grows stronger even through change as seen by the metaphor, an ice cream sundae. The romance is always there, ready to flare up with passion when two hearts share their love and friendship. I like this simile -
"love still flows like sweet Hershey syrup
upon rocky mountains of love" - very creative way of expressing this trait of love.
Excellent closing lines. Well penned. Write on!

[SyberRose]

Thank you Shelley...such a nice review too...I do appreciate it...Rose:)

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Rose.

[Cassie]

Nice write as always Rose, And am getting addicted to peeking at your writings even if there are no RRs,

[SyberRose]

haa...I am addicted to this place anyway Cassie...thank you for peeking in...:)

[Angi]

Hpw dare he always want that cherry on top?! Ha! Nice rhyme and now I want some vanilla bean. Angi~

[SyberRose]

Yes with chocolate syrup Angi...thanks for peeking in tonight:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Silly and Fabulous - just like the author! x

[SyberRose]

And sweet like the author haa...thanks again Thomas...hug