Dear Knight(Sonnet)

Painting by Fine Art Tapestries Leighton's Godspeed Maiden Knight

My lips are lonely without thee dear knight

'Tis not thine enemy that I doth fear,

Whilst mine heart is weary by candlelight

Thy bones ache with each and every tear.

Without thee my moistened lips shall wither

Thus; a mere thorn without a crimson rose,

Henceforth, my beloved, do come hither

Before sweet petals of thy heart dost close.

My knight with sword, shining armour and blood

In pale moonlight my ears hearest thou cries,

Thee lips bid adieu, sweet kiss of rosebuds

Thou art now but a bright star in thine eyes.

Thy feathered quill upon red parchment stains,

Teardrops and blood ink flow whilst moonlight wanes.

©SyberRose

Author's Note

Stella helped me with this and I drove her crazy with the thee thou and thys again...
Thank you Stella again for your patience...I welcome critiques from anyone who enjoys this Old English form...Warmly, SyberRose

Reviews

[xxlheart]

yeah I have a critique, this is major showing off. completely brilliant. by being very similar to the masters of poetry this becomes something very fresh and wonderful. wow you are good.

[SyberRose]

You are too mind and I will have to come visit you real soon...thank you so much...Rose

[xxlheart]

you are very welcome and I was just being honest. my wife agrees this was fresh and wonderful and she doesn't lie :)

[Cassie]

I wish you can teach me to do sonnets. This is so lovely, I enjoyed reading it and am gon put it in my library.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Cassie...they are fun to learn...but the old English is a little harder because of the
read moreThank you Cassie...they are fun to learn...but the old English is a little harder because of the
language...lots of instructions though about sonnets on the internet too...Rose:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well done, Stella. I felt like a knight reading this from atop my steed. Excellent piece!

[SyberRose]

Thank you Stella and I thank you for peeking in Poetic Heroics...glad you enjoyed...Rose:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I'm constantly peeking in on you, and taking notes. ;)

[SyberRose]

Well everybody here is an inspiration...thats for sure...its nice to know I inspire too.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

That you do.

[ANTO]

Its great work Rose. I can just imagine a damsel writing this during the crusades. Do you believe is past lives Rose....?

[SyberRose]

Its sort of a mystery to me...no evidence of it yet...although I did have a seance once in my house just for fun...a bunch of friends...and the woman told me I was once a princess in a tribe in the Andes Mountains and I was thrown out of my tribe for marrying someone from another tribe...I just took it with a grain of salt. Why do you ask?...thanks for reading Anthony...Rose

[ANTO]

I dunno. I guess because if there is anything in it then you may well be writing from there, you do it so well.

[SyberRose]

Oh I see..well I never thought about that...interesting.

[Roopal]

This is one of the best pieces I have read since I have been here. Though I'm new, nut I can tell this is no match to any other poem. I loved it so much that I read it again and again... you are really talented. This piece is amazing.

"My knight with sword, shining armour and blood
In pale moonlight my ears hearest thou cries,
Thee lips bid adieu, sweet kiss of rosebuds
Thou art now but a bright star in thine eyes."

I am out of words here. Keep that pen moving, all the best. :)

[SyberRose]

thank you Roopal...I'm glad you enjoy the Old English style language...Rose:)

[quinfinn]

wonderful job, Stella has a gift indeed, as do you...a fine collab!

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much Quin...thee thy and thou thanks you haa...Rose

[Soma-ko]

Ah, old English. I believe the last thing I read in old English was Macbeth, and that was a year ago... The poem sounds very eloquent and smooth which is why I absolutely loved this read. How you have a special and unique feel of romance is something you utilize so well. Great job, and much enjoyed. :)

[SyberRose]

Thank you so very much Soma...I alway love your responses...so glad you enjoyed...Rose:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the knight is the poet..and his sword the pen...

i would never even attempt this Old English style...and you do it so so well.

it is like you become this poet from a past age.

nicely done.

[Ency Bearis]

Another beautiful classic sonnet you had presented. Pleasure to read.

[SyberRose]

Thanks Ency...I only do a couple a year but I'm glad you enjoyed it...Rose :)

[Ency Bearis]

Great thoughts within you and keep it up. You're welcome.

[Rita L. Sev]

You certainly channeled Shakespeare in this write - excellent romantic sonnet!

[SyberRose]

Thank you Rita...I love doing romance ha...Thanks for peeking in...Rose