Come with me, through the twilight hour While moist dew, flows like a teardrop On every dark rose, and sweet flower Come take my hand, to the mountain tops
The purple fog will weave a web of love You will be mine, until tomorrow When the kiss of dew, is upon the earths crust Then my love for you, will turn to sorrow
And as you leave, and go on your way Just maybe we will meet again My lonesome tears, will flow into the bay Down the mountain tops, until then
As long as the moon guides the dark shadows I will mourn our love like a black widow.
Though the picket fence he walked,
Into a field of lingering distraught.
Shoes made wet from the dew just formed,
Making his way to the opened door.
His face shone, like the moon's ray that night,
Making me feel full of bliss at his sight.
Tears leaked through my eyes, for they were held captive,
Restrained from leaving, when he left me feeling hapless.
The night still shrouded the moving earth,
My feelings for him were everything but dearth.
As he came closer, it was harder to see,
Any of his features, for it was just a dream.
Sorry if this bored you, but I made this up after reading this poem. This poem definitely held dark aspects to it as it neared the end, and I enjoyed reading it from the start to the finish.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thanks very nice...well you are a fast writer ha...faster then I am..Im glad you enjoyed.
Rose
11 Years Ago
All of my work is basically what I'm thinking, but placed in a poem format. Ergo, for me personally,.. read moreAll of my work is basically what I'm thinking, but placed in a poem format. Ergo, for me personally, excruciating boredom is extremely helpful. I'll be waiting for your next piece as well, keep up the awesome poems.
This was quite well done. I enjoyed the imagery, and the metaphors that weave love with nature are very nicely done. I also like how you used "web of love" and then "black widow" at the end; a nice bit of foreshadowing that leads us to a little different place in terms of emotion. All in all, I found this quite breathtaking.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you very much Sarah and for peeking in...I appreciate your nice comments...Rose
What wouldn't one give for such love................. for such a soulmate..............beautiful as Rose
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you for peeking in today...so glad you enjoyed...I always appreciate your nice comments...Ros.. read moreThank you for peeking in today...so glad you enjoyed...I always appreciate your nice comments...Rose
11 Years Ago
The pleasure is all mine................... your beautiful poems are a treat
You show the ups and downs to light and dark, the good and bad, great force and evil, this was deep and sentimental, and it really stroked my heart!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much Ashley...I'm glad you enjoyed my poem this morning...Rose
11 Years Ago
I enjoyed it very much and was very very impressed with it! Thank you for allowing me to read such a.. read moreI enjoyed it very much and was very very impressed with it! Thank you for allowing me to read such a beautiful piece of work!
Though the picket fence he walked,
Into a field of lingering distraught.
Shoes made wet from the dew just formed,
Making his way to the opened door.
His face shone, like the moon's ray that night,
Making me feel full of bliss at his sight.
Tears leaked through my eyes, for they were held captive,
Restrained from leaving, when he left me feeling hapless.
The night still shrouded the moving earth,
My feelings for him were everything but dearth.
As he came closer, it was harder to see,
Any of his features, for it was just a dream.
Sorry if this bored you, but I made this up after reading this poem. This poem definitely held dark aspects to it as it neared the end, and I enjoyed reading it from the start to the finish.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thanks very nice...well you are a fast writer ha...faster then I am..Im glad you enjoyed.
Rose
11 Years Ago
All of my work is basically what I'm thinking, but placed in a poem format. Ergo, for me personally,.. read moreAll of my work is basically what I'm thinking, but placed in a poem format. Ergo, for me personally, excruciating boredom is extremely helpful. I'll be waiting for your next piece as well, keep up the awesome poems.
"Just maybe we will meet again
My lonesome tears, will flow into the bay
Down the mountain tops, until then
As long as the moon guides the dark shadows
I will mourn our love like a black widow."
This write is fading into the twilight of love but rising with the moonbeams of hope...A very magical write...:)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you Sami...I'm happy you enjoyed...and hope you are having a nice night.
i enjoyed this one . its very hard to have a relationship or a lover you hardly see . the moments you spend with them feel surreal you captured this moment with excellent imagery here .
Welcome to my profile: I was born in England, and raised in the U.S and now living in Virginia. I write mostly of romance and nature....I prefer not to send read requests so if you wish just read at y.. more..