Kindred spirit, unto thee I have sought, And embrace the reflection in thine eyes. The long search for a love hast been but naught; Thou art but the brightest star in the skies.
Be thou forever my heart of all hearts, Forever in thine arms my armored knight. Sweet memories of past loves shalt depart, Beyond the misty halo of moonlight.
Thyself is not a vain dim witted wench, A temptress breathes in the depths of my soul. Whilst sweet dream of thy kisses I shalt clench; And 'tis thy strings of mine heart that doth toll.
My feathered quill, is as sharp as thy sword; Whilst seductive words shalt melt thee My Lord.
the last couplet made me smile, yes, us poets wield our pens like swordsman and we can be lethal (but always very poetic). i liked the olde worlde charm of this. fantastic.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much...and for peeking in..I appreciate it...SyberRose
"Be thou forever my heart of all hearts,
Forever in thine arms my armored knight.
Sweet memories of past loves shalt depart,
beyond the misty halo of moonlight."
Exquisite poem to say the least. I felt transported to the days of Romeo and Juliet. Thank you for penning this write...:)
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you Sami...does this mean I wont see you tomorrow haa..
This reminds me of the classics...I can hear a little Shakespeare, perhaps some Keats or Coleridge. I like the feel of this one; sometimes it's nice to read a piece that just lets it all go and turns back the hands of time to a more romantic world. I think it was beautifully done, and I really don't have a lot to critique. The last two lines are my favorite.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you very much Sarah...I appreciate your comments..Glad you enjoyed
Rose
i had to read the last two lines a couple times to keep in rhythm...but that is me.
this poem is beautiful...and i envy anyone who can do this so well, this sonnet thing
and keep that perfect iambic pentameter...for 14 lines...without having the poem feel like it is just about form...
the words and feelings in this take over quickly...and we almost forget it is done in that old form...
Mrs. Shakespeare here i think...William would have smiled at this poem...
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you Jacob ...I appreciate your kind words...I just noticed though I have to add a two more syl.. read morethank you Jacob ...I appreciate your kind words...I just noticed though I have to add a two more syllables to the third line. thanks again...Rose
How incredibly beautiful, Rose! I love the archaic language. It seems to be making a comeback and I am just thrilled. I love the romanticism of this sonnet. I cannot find anything wrong with your rhythm, rhyme and flow. Excellent!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you Lori...nice to hear from you tonight...appreciate you comments..I did do some more editing.. read moreThank you Lori...nice to hear from you tonight...appreciate you comments..I did do some more editing though...Rose
Welcome to my profile: I was born in England, and raised in the U.S and now living in Virginia. I write mostly of romance and nature....I prefer not to send read requests so if you wish just read at y.. more..